Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unnecessary filler and keep to 2–4 sentences. Also correct tense/use of purpose phrase: use 'so I could' or 'which I used to' instead of 'so that I can'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. It was a simple, single-speed bike that I used to ride to school every day. After classes, I often cycled with a close childhood friend to a nearby park, which was our favourite place to explore.

Sugerencia: Eliminate hesitation and repetition. Answer directly, then give two clear, specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'first' and 'second' or 'because' and 'also'). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'popular' rather than 'famous') and avoid vague phrases like 'green space'. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. First, many children use them for their daily commute to school because they are inexpensive and convenient. Second, older people often cycle for exercise and leisure in parks and bike lanes, which makes cycling a common activity across age groups.

× Yes I did, I remember it was just a normal bike so that I can go to school every day and also go cycling with my childhood friend after school.

✓ Yes, I did. I remember it was just a normal bike so that I could go to school every day and could also go cycling with my childhood friend after school.

The sentence mixes past-time context with present modal 'can'. The student is describing a past situation ('when you were a child'), so modal verbs and complementary verbs should be in the past (could) rather than present (can). Use 'could' to match past tense and maintain consistency. Also split into shorter sentences and add commas for clarity.

× Personally, I think that bikes are very, uh, famous in my country because, uh, as I have said, many, many children use them to go to school every day, as well as old people also use them as a form of exercising, uh, to give them more time in their green space. Yeah.

✓ Personally, I think that bikes are very popular in my country because, as I said, many children use them to go to school every day, and older people also use them for exercise and to spend time in green spaces.

'famous' is not the correct collocation for objects used commonly; 'popular' is appropriate. Remove filler 'uh' and simplify 'as I have said' to 'as I said'. 'Old people' is better expressed as 'older people'. Use 'for exercise' instead of 'as a form of exercising'. 'Green space' should be pluralized to 'green spaces' for general meaning. Also improve conjunctions: use 'and' rather than 'as well as ... also' to avoid redundancy.