Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Speak more clearly and organize your answer into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Avoid repetition (remove filler words like “well” and repeated phrases). Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood, and give a specific short reason or example for what happened to the bike. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. Unfortunately, I wasn’t careful with it and I damaged one of the parts, so it became unusable. Because of that experience, I don’t really ride bikes as a hobby now.

Sugerencia: Give a clearer, logical reason and avoid confusing phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details (e.g., reasons like cost, traffic, or environment) and use linking words (because, for example). Avoid contradictory or unclear statements such as “spend less is the best way to be rich.”

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Peru. They are an affordable way to get around and are convenient in crowded cities, so many people choose them instead of cars. For example, I often see people commuting by bike to work or school.

× Well, when it was well when I say well when I was a child, yes I had a bike.

✓ Well, when I say when I was a child, yes, I had a bike.

The original sentence repeats filler words and has an awkward structure. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove the repeated phrases and reorder to produce a clear clause: 'When I say when I was a child' or more naturally 'When I was a child'. Include commas to set off the introductory phrase and keep the past-tense verb 'had' to match the time reference.

× However I was in too careful with it.

✓ However, I was not careful enough with it.

This is a past tense and word-choice error (ID 5). The phrase 'in too careful' is ungrammatical. Use the past-tense adjective phrase 'was not careful enough' to express lack of care in the past. Add a comma after 'However' to separate the clauses.

× So suddenly I give damage to that bike and a part of that.

✓ So I suddenly damaged the bike and part of it.

This is a past tense issue (ID 5). 'Give damage' is incorrect — the correct verb is 'damage' and it should be in past tense 'damaged' to match the time frame. 'A part of that' is awkward; replace with 'part of it' for clarity and correct pronoun reference.

× But until now I don't have a hobby to ride a bike.

✓ But until now I haven't had the hobby of riding a bike.

This concerns present perfect vs simple present (ID 6). 'Don't have a hobby to ride a bike' is unnatural. Use present perfect 'haven't had' to link past to present ('until now') and use 'the hobby of riding a bike' or 'a hobby of riding a bike' for correct noun phrase. Alternatively, 'I still don't have a hobby of riding a bike.'

× Yes, I think so, because here in Peru will I live in Peru, the the bikes are very popular.

✓ Yes, I think so, because here in Peru the bikes are very popular.

This contains sentence structure errors and unnecessary repetition (ID 26). Remove the extraneous phrase 'will I live in Peru' and the duplicated 'the'. The remaining clause 'here in Peru the bikes are very popular' is grammatical; include commas appropriately.

× When you want to spend less, we have that culture.

✓ When people want to spend less, we have that culture.

This is an incorrect conjunction/pronoun reference and generalization issue (ID 16). 'When you want to spend less' mixes second-person with general statement; use 'people' or 'we' consistently. 'We have that culture' is okay but better: 'we have that cultural habit' or 'we have that culture of frugality.'

× When you spend less is the best way to to be like, to be rich.

✓ Spending less is considered the best way to become rich.

This is a sentence structure and verb form error (ID 26). The original mixes clauses and uses infinitive forms incorrectly. Use the gerund 'Spending less' as the subject, and 'is considered the best way to become rich' for idiomatic expression. Remove the duplicated 'to' and the filler 'to be like.'