Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct past tense and linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and redundant phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I had my first bike when I was seven; it originally belonged to my father. It is still in our garage, and sometimes I ride it for short trips around the neighborhood.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence followed by specific reasons and use linking words to organize your points. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., affordable, widely used) and avoid repetition and fillers.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and reliable. For example, many middle-class families use bikes for daily commuting, and people across different income levels prefer them for short trips since they save money on fuel and parking.

× Uh, yes, uh, I had a bike when I was a child, but it's not was 9.

✓ Uh, yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I wasn't 9.

The phrase 'it's not was 9' mixes present 'it's' and past 'was' and uses incorrect construction. Use past tense 'was' with negation 'wasn't' to refer to age in the past. Also remove filler words for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I wasn't 9' or 'I wasn't nine years old.'

× Uh, it was my, uh, father, uh, he ride, uh, ride that bike, uh, when I was 7 and the bike is still in our garage and sometimes I ride the bike.

✓ It was my father; he rode that bike when I was 7, and the bike is still in our garage, and sometimes I ride it.

Multiple issues: after introducing 'my father' you should not repeat subject with 'he' incorrectly with present tense. 'Ride' must be past tense 'rode' to match 'when I was 7'. Also replace 'the bike' with pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition. Use punctuation to separate clauses. Suggestion: use 'he rode' for past actions and 'I ride it sometimes' for habitual present.

× Yes uh, bikes are very popular in my country and it's a vehicle of middle class and it's very reliable, uh low cost.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country; they are a vehicle for the middle class, and they are very reliable and low-cost.

Subject 'bikes' is plural, so refer with plural pronoun 'they' not singular 'it'. Use 'for the middle class' rather than 'of middle class'. Use parallel structure and hyphenate 'low-cost' as an adjective. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun and use correct preposition 'for'.

× So uh, in our country, poor to high class everyone uh dream to have a bike.

✓ So, in our country, everyone from the poor to the upper classes dreams of having a bike.

Word order and quantifier expression are incorrect. Use 'everyone from A to B' to show range. 'Everyone' is singular and takes singular verb 'dreams'. Use gerund 'having' after 'dreams of'. Also 'high class' is better phrased 'upper classes' or 'the wealthy'. Suggestion: use 'everyone from the poor to the rich dreams of having a bike.'