Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 2–3 concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler phrases. Also correct tense and pronoun errors (e.g., "my father bought it for me" and "he taught me").

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. My father bought me a small blue-and-white bike when I was a child, and he taught me how to ride it. I remember it felt very light and fun to ride, and I used it to go to the park almost every afternoon.

Sugerencia: Be consistent and precise. Start with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons or examples and linking words. Avoid contradictory or confusing phrases ("riding bike" vs "riding bicycles"). Use quantifiers or locations for clarity (e.g., "in cities" or "in parks").

Ejemplo: Not very popular. In my country most people prefer to drive cars or use motorbikes for daily travel, especially in cities, because they are faster. However, you can still see people riding bicycles in parks and some suburbs, mainly for exercise or leisure.

× Of course that I had a bike when I was a child that my father bought it to me and she and he also taught me how to ride it.

✓ Of course I had a bike when I was a child; my father bought it for me, and he also taught me how to ride it.

The original sentence uses incorrect pronouns and word order: 'Of course that I had' is ungrammatical — the demonstrative 'that' is unnecessary. 'Bought it to me' is wrong; English uses 'buy something for someone'. 'She and he' is incorrect and unnecessary; use 'he' to refer to father. Also combine clauses with proper punctuation. Suggestion: remove 'that', use 'bought it for me', and replace 'she and he' with 'he'.

× Oh my God, it's so. It was so beautiful.

✓ Oh my God, it was so beautiful.

The fragment 'it's so.' is incomplete and mixes present and past unnecessarily. The speaker is recalling a past memory, so use past tense 'it was so beautiful.' Avoid sentence fragments; combine into one clear past-tense sentence.

× I so remember that it was blue and white.

✓ I vividly remember that it was blue and white.

'I so remember' is informal and ungrammatical in this context. Use an appropriate adverb such as 'vividly' or 'clearly' before the verb to modify 'remember'. This improves register and grammar.

× It's quite small.

✓ It was quite small.

The speaker is describing a past object; tense should be past 'was' rather than present 'is'. Ensure tense consistency in narrative.

× I don't think people like riding bike so much.

✓ I don't think people like riding bikes so much.

Countable noun 'bike' when used generally should be plural 'bikes' after 'riding' to indicate the activity. Use plural to describe people in general.

× Most of them like riding bicycles or driving cars.

✓ Most of them like riding bicycles or driving cars.

This sentence is acceptable; no grammatical correction needed. (Included to show no change.)

× I think it's more common in my country.

✓ I think it's more common in my country.

This sentence is acceptable as is; tense and structure fit the question. (Included to show no change.)

× And of course I I also see some people still ride bikes in the park, but it's less often.

✓ And of course I also see some people still riding bikes in the park, but it's less often.

Remove the duplicate 'I'. Use 'see some people still riding' — the verb 'see' is followed by a verb in -ing to describe an ongoing action. Alternatively, 'I also still see some people riding bikes...' improves word order. 'It's less often' is informal but acceptable; consider 'this happens less often' for clarity.