Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix verb forms (e.g., "he wanted me"), vocabulary errors ("riding" not "writing"), and word order. Keep to a maximum of about 3–4 concise sentences to sound natural.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bicycle when I was eight because he wanted me to stay active. As a result, I often rode it around my neighborhood with friends, which helped me make new friends and enjoy outdoor exercise.

Sugerencia: Make your opinion clear with one topic sentence, then support it with two concise, specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "it is much more convenient", "they have a lot of work/study", "travel by car"). Avoid repetition and filler words.

Ejemplo: I don't think bicycles are very popular. Mostly young people prefer private cars because they find them more convenient for commuting to work or university, and cars are faster when traveling longer distances.

× he want to me to stay active

✓ he wanted me to stay active

The verb 'want' must agree with the subject in tense and number. The context is past ('my father bought me a bike when I was 8'), so the verb should be in past tense 'wanted'. Also remove the incorrect indirect object order 'to me'; use 'wanted me to stay active'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for verbs when narrating past events.

× I really enjoyed uh, writing, umm, in writing, uh, it around neighborhood with my friends

✓ I really enjoyed riding it around the neighborhood with my friends

The speaker intended the action of using the bike, which requires the verb 'ride' and its -ing form 'riding' as the object of 'enjoyed'. 'Writing' is incorrect. Also 'it around neighborhood' lacks the article and correct word order; use 'riding it around the neighborhood'. Suggestion: Choose the correct verb (ride) and include articles ('the neighborhood'), and place the object 'it' after the gerund when needed.

× Actually I don't think so because in my country especially the huge majority of young people like to have some private cars and it much more convenient for them because they have much works to do, they have studying and uh, moved to somewhere with private color is much more convenient

✓ Actually I don't think so because in my country especially the vast majority of young people like to have private cars and it is much more convenient for them because they have a lot of work to do, they are studying, and moving somewhere by private car is much more convenient

Multiple issues: 'the huge majority' is awkward; use 'the vast majority'. 'some private cars' should be 'private cars'. Missing verb 'is' in 'it much more convenient'. 'much works' is uncountable error—use 'a lot of work'. 'they have studying' is incorrect; use 'they are studying' or 'they study'. 'moved to somewhere with private color' has wrong verb tense and 'color' is a typo for 'car'; use 'moving somewhere by private car'. Suggestion: Use appropriate noun phrases ('a lot of work'), correct verb forms and tenses ('are studying', 'moving'), include necessary verbs ('is'), and fix typos ('car').