Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases (e.g., “working Bush tense”). Combine related ideas into one fluent sentence and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “commuted” instead of “was on working”).

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t. My school was within walking distance, so I never needed to commute by bike. Also, my family couldn’t afford one when I was young, so buying a bike wasn’t an option.

Sugerencia: Give a clearer main point and support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., “car ownership is higher cost” or “low-income workers”). Avoid awkward phrases like “experience of having car is higher.” Provide one or two concrete examples or comparisons to strengthen the answer.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think bikes are very popular. Firstly, they are much cheaper to buy and maintain than cars, which makes them affordable for low-income workers. Secondly, they are practical for short trips in crowded cities, so many people choose bikes over cars.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my school was on working Bush tense from my home, so there was no need for having a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my school was within walking distance from my home, so there was no need to have a bike.

Multiple issues: incorrect phrase 'on working Bush tense' is unclear and likely meant 'within walking distance' (sentence structure error, ID 26). 'There was no need for having a bike' is unidiomatic; use 'no need to have a bike' (incorrect use of verb + -ing form, ID 8, and sentence structure). Suggested correction fixes meaning, improves verb form and natural phrasing. Use 'within walking distance' to indicate proximity and 'no need to have' for correct infinitive usage.

× And umm, then the reason is the financial condition.

✓ And then the reason was my family's financial situation.

Past tense issue (ID 5): the context is past ('when I was a child'), so verb tense should be past ('was' not 'is'). Also 'financial condition' is awkward; 'financial situation' or 'family's financial situation' is more natural. Suggest using 'was' and reordering to 'my family's financial situation' to clarify possession.

× Umm, the financial condition of my family was not good.

✓ Umm, my family's financial situation was not good.

Incorrect use of adjectives or nouns (ID 13): 'financial condition' is awkward but not strictly wrong; more natural collocation is 'financial situation'. Also use possessive 'my family's' for clarity. Maintain past tense to match context.

× Yes, they are quite popular vehicles because the experience of having car is higher, but the bikes can be affordable by the low salary personnel.

✓ Yes, they are quite popular because owning a car is more expensive, but bikes are affordable for low-income people.

Present tense is acceptable for general statements (ID 6) but sentence has multiple problems: 'the experience of having car is higher' is incorrect meaning and grammar (sentence structure error, ID 26). Should say 'owning a car is more expensive' (verb + -ing as noun 'owning' is appropriate). 'the bikes can be affordable by the low salary personnel' has incorrect preposition and word choice (incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11, and incorrect use of pronouns/nouns, ID 12). Replace with 'bikes are affordable for low-income people'. Suggest using 'owning' and 'affordable for' with 'low-income people'.

× So then that's why the bike is more popular than the other vehicles.

✓ So that's why bikes are more popular than other vehicles.

Subject-verb agreement and article errors (ID 27 and ID 22): 'the bike is more popular' general statement should use plural 'bikes are' to refer to the category. Also 'the other vehicles' is unnecessary; use 'other vehicles'. Simplify to 'bikes are more popular than other vehicles' for correct agreement and natural usage.