Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Ваша відповідь зрозуміла, але є проблеми з плавністю, пунктуацією та зв'язністю. По-перше, уникайте фрагментарних речень («but I preferred. Skates.») — краще об’єднувати і використовувати сполучники. По-друге, скоротіть зайві заповнювачі («uh») і зайві повтори («me and my friends, we were»). По-третє, додайте одну-дві конкретні деталі (наприклад, як часто ви каталися або чому обирали ролики), щоб зробити відповідь багатшою, але не довшою за 5 речень. Нарешті, використайте логічні зв’язки (because, so, while) для кращої когерентності.

Ejemplo: I did have a bike as a child, but I preferred skating because we had a big yard next to our house. My friends and I used to skate almost every afternoon, and only some of them rode bikes while I practiced jumps and turns on my skates.

Sugerencia: Ваша відповідь має хорошу ідею, але є помилки в слововживанні, граматиці і завершенні думки. Видаліть помилки типу подвійного дієслова («finding find») і закінчуйте речення логічно (не залишайте «instead of» без об'єкта). Також уточніть «city 11» — краще сказати «my city» або назвати її. Додайте одну конкретну причину або приклад (наприклад, короткі відстані, велодоріжки або проблеми з паркуванням). Використовуйте зв'язки (because, so, therefore) і обмежтеся не більше ніж 4–5 реченнями.

Ejemplo: In my city, I think bikes are more popular than cars because distances are short and petrol is expensive. Many people find cycling more convenient for daily commuting, and the city has several bike lanes that make it safer. Therefore, more residents choose bikes to save money and avoid traffic.

× When I was a child I had a bike, but I preferred. Skates.

✓ When I was a child I had a bike, but I preferred skates.

The error is a sentence structure problem caused by an unnecessary period breaking the sentence into fragments. Combine the clauses into one sentence and use a lowercase 'skates' after the verb 'preferred' to complete the thought. Suggestion: keep the object of 'preferred' directly after it without an intervening full stop.

× We had a big yard outside my house, so me and my friends, we were always skating and uh, some of them were driving bikes.

✓ We had a big yard outside my house, so my friends and I were always skating and some of them rode bikes.

The original uses the incorrect object pronoun 'me' instead of the subject pronoun 'I' and contains an unnecessary comma and redundant subject 'we'. Also 'were driving bikes' is awkward for habitual past activity; 'rode bikes' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'my friends and I' as the subject, remove redundancy, and use simple past 'rode' for repeated past actions.

× As for city 11, I think bikes are the better option than a car because my city is not so big and the petrol is very expensive now so most people are finding find it more convenient to drive bikes instead of.

✓ As for City 11, I think bikes are a better option than cars because my city is not very big and petrol is very expensive now, so most people find it more convenient to ride bikes instead of driving cars.

Multiple issues: 'the better option' and 'a car' cause mismatch in comparison; use 'a better option than cars' for general comparison. 'Most people are finding find' has duplication; use simple present 'find' for general truth. 'Drive bikes' is unnatural in this context; use 'ride bikes' and specify 'instead of driving cars' to complete the contrast. Also capitalize 'City 11' if it is a proper noun. Suggestion: streamline comparisons, remove duplicate words, use appropriate verbs ('ride' for bicycles) and complete the contrasting phrase.