Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar (past tense consistency), shorten and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details, avoid fillers (uh) and redundancy. Use linking words (first, then, so) correctly and provide one specific detail (age, purpose, or memory).

Ejemplo: Yes. I had a bike as a child. At first I used a four-wheel balance bike to learn how to ride, but when I was about six I switched to a green two-wheel bicycle so I could ride to school and visit friends.

Sugerencia: Correct vocabulary and grammar (bike/back, transportation, people's → people), make one clear opinion sentence followed by specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, also) to connect ideas and avoid overgeneralization.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in China because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, in cities people often ride shared bikes to work, and bikes are environmentally friendly because they produce no exhaust emissions.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child, I have a four wheel bike that first, but when I'm getting older, I don't need the assistance for me to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I first had a four-wheel bike, but as I got older I didn’t need the assistance to ride a bike.

The student mixed present tense with past-tense context. The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be past tense (had, got). 'Have' should be 'had'. 'I have a four wheel bike that first' is ungrammatical; reorder to 'I first had a four-wheel bike'. 'When I'm getting older' should be 'as I got older' to match past timeframe. 'Don't need the assistance for me to ride' is awkward; 'didn’t need the assistance to ride' is correct. Also hyphenate 'four-wheel'. Suggestion: Keep all verbs in past tense when describing past events and use natural connectors like 'first' and 'as'.

× So I just took it off and then I have a 2 wheel bike which is uh, perfectly for me to get to other places and it's a green color bike.

✓ So I just took it off and then I had a two-wheel bike which was perfect for getting to other places, and it was green.

This sentence mixes past and present. 'I have a 2 wheel bike' should be past 'I had a two-wheel bike' to match earlier past context. 'Which is uh, perfectly for me to get to other places' wrongly uses adjective/adverb forms and structure: 'perfectly' (adverb) is incorrect; use 'perfect' (adjective) and 'for getting' or 'for getting me to other places' is unnatural — use 'perfect for getting to other places' or 'perfect for travelling to places'. 'It's a green color bike' is awkward; 'it was green' is natural. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and use 'two-wheel' and 'perfect for getting to other places'.

× I think back is quite popular in my country because a lot of people's riding bike too as a transportations in our country in China and bike gets very sustainable since they don't release any carbon dioxide in the air.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people ride bikes as a means of transportation in China, and bikes are very sustainable since they don’t release carbon dioxide into the air.

Multiple issues: 'back' is wrong word; should be 'bikes' (plural). 'A lot of people's riding bike too' misuses possessive and verb form; use 'many people ride bikes'. 'As a transportations' incorrect article and plural; use 'as a means of transportation' or 'as transportation'. 'In our country in China' is redundant; 'in China' suffices. 'Bike gets very sustainable' wrong subject-verb and adjective choice; use 'bikes are very sustainable'. 'They don't release any carbon dioxide in the air' is acceptable but 'into the air' is more natural; keep contraction 'don’t'. Suggestion: use correct plural nouns, correct verb forms, and clearer phrase 'means of transportation'.