Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is natural, relevant and gives a clear personal anecdote which is good. To improve, remove filler words (e.g., “Uh”), correct small mistakes (‘reading writing’ → ‘riding’), and tighten the response to stay within five sentences. Add one specific detail (e.g., where you rode or who taught you) using a linking word to make the answer more coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven and I was absolutely thrilled. It was a bright red bike with training wheels, and I rode it around my neighborhood almost every day after school. Because my older brother taught me to balance, I felt confident quickly, and it gave me a wonderful sense of freedom.

Sugerencia: The response addresses the question and gives reasons, but there are grammatical errors and unclear phrases (‘on to get around’, ‘the instructor isn’t always great’) and an unfinished final sentence. To improve, use clear vocabulary, complete your thoughts, and add a linking word when giving contrasting information. Also provide a specific example (e.g., a city or statistic) to strengthen your point.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly popular, especially in big cities. Many people switch to cycling because it is cheaper and healthier than driving; moreover, it helps avoid traffic. However, infrastructure is lacking — for example, in my city there are very few dedicated bike lanes, which makes cycling less safe for commuters.

× I remember reading writing it around the neighborhood almost every single day after school.

✓ I remember riding it around the neighborhood almost every single day after school.

The student wrote 'reading writing' which appears to be a typographical or lexical error. The intended verb is 'ride' in its gerund form 'riding' because 'remember' followed by an -ing verb expresses a past memory of an action. Use 'riding' to correctly convey recalling the action of riding the bike. Suggestion: replace the incorrect words with 'riding'.

× A lot of people are switching to cycling because it's a cheaper and healthy way to go on to get around.

✓ A lot of people are switching to cycling because it's a cheaper and healthier way to get around.

The phrase mixes adjective forms and contains an extra phrase 'go on to'. When comparing two adjectives describing 'way', use parallel adjective forms: 'cheaper' and 'healthier'. Also remove the redundant 'go on to'; the correct phrasing is 'a way to get around'. Suggestion: use parallel adjectival forms and simplify to 'a way to get around'.

× However, the instructor isn't always great.

✓ However, the infrastructure isn't always great.

Contextually, the student is discussing bike lanes and urban cycling; 'instructor' (a person who teaches) is unlikely and creates a semantic error. The intended word appears to be 'infrastructure' (systems and facilities such as roads and lanes). This is a lexical choice error affecting sentence meaning rather than grammar, but it changes the sentence structure's coherence. Suggestion: replace 'instructor' with 'infrastructure' to match context.

× We don't have as many bike lanes as we should, which can make.

✓ We don't have as many bike lanes as we should, which can make cycling dangerous or difficult.

The clause 'which can make' is incomplete; a which-clause must refer back to the preceding clause and include what the lack of bike lanes makes (e.g., cycling dangerous or difficult). This is a sentence fragment/error of incomplete thought. Suggestion: finish the clause by specifying the consequence, such as 'which can make cycling dangerous or difficult'.