Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (like, you know) and correct verb forms (e.g., “ride a bike,” “for about ten years,” “since I was ten”).

Ejemplo: Yes. I had a bike from the age of ten and I rode it for about ten years with my dad. We often biked on mountain trails, which could be quite dangerous, but we enjoyed the challenge and the scenery.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct collocations (e.g., “bicycles are popular/unpopular,” “indoor activities”) and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, however, because) to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I don't think bicycles are very popular in South Korea because many people prefer indoor activities. For example, young people often go to gyms or indoor hobby centers. However, some families, like mine, do enjoy cycling: my father goes cycling on weekends.

× Yes, I did when I was young.

✓ Yes, I did when I was young.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable for answering 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?'. It correctly uses the past tense auxiliary 'did' with the implied verb 'have'. No change required.

× Like I, I used to like bike for like 10 years since I was 10 with my dad.

✓ I used to like riding a bike for about 10 years, starting when I was 10, with my dad.

Errors: incorrect verb form and missing gerund ('riding') after 'like' and incorrect article before 'bike'. Use 'riding a bike' or 'ride a bike' as the activity. 'Since I was 10' is replaced by 'starting when I was 10' to match 'used to' and duration expression 'for about 10 years'. Suggestion: use gerund after 'like' and include articles and clearer time expressions.

× I used to go to like mountain and then we bike on the mountain.

✓ I used to go to the mountains and then we would ride our bikes on them.

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'mountain' and wrong verb 'bike' used as an action (use 'ride' or 'ride bikes'). Also plural 'mountains' fits general meaning. Use 'on them' or 'there' rather than repeating 'the mountain'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions/articles and appropriate verb collocations like 'ride a bike' or 'ride bikes'.

× That was like pretty dangerous, but you know, it was so fun.

✓ That was pretty dangerous, but it was so much fun.

Errors: filler 'like' is unnecessary and informal; 'so fun' is acceptable colloquially but 'so much fun' is more natural. Suggestion: remove unnecessary fillers and use more natural collocations.

× I think cycle is not really popular in my country.

✓ I don't think cycling is very popular in my country.

Errors: 'cycle' as a noun is awkward; use the gerund 'cycling' to refer to the activity. Use negative construction 'I don't think' plus adverb 'very' instead of 'not really'. Suggestion: use gerund for activities and prefer natural adverb placement.

× Like in in Korea we usually do something indoor activities, not really outside activity.

✓ In Korea we usually do indoor activities rather than outdoor activities.

Errors: double 'in', awkward phrasing 'do something indoor activities' and singular 'outside activity'. Use 'indoor activities' and contrast with 'outdoor activities'. Suggestion: remove fillers, correct article/number agreement, and use parallel structure.

× So I don't think we really decide global like a special specifically especially in my family, my dad really loves to.

✓ So I don't think cycling is popular overall, although in my family my dad really loves it.

Errors: sentence is ungrammatical and confused: 'decide global like a special specifically especially' is nonstandard. Also missing object for 'loves to'. Recast sentence to state the intended contrast: not popular generally, but dad likes cycling. Suggestion: simplify and use clear subject-verb-object structure, include pronoun 'it' for 'cycling' or 'bikes'.