Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct grammar and sequence, and add a brief reflection. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past simple consistently, and link ideas with a reason connector. Limit to 3–4 sentences. For example, say when you had the bike, what happened, and how you felt or what you did after.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I rode it often around my neighborhood. However, it was stolen when I left it parked outside our house, so I stopped riding after that. That was disappointing because I loved cycling and it made me more cautious about leaving things unattended.

Sugerencia: Remove fillers, give a clear general opinion then support with specific reasons and a linking phrase. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'popular', 'commuting') and complete the final thought. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Generally, biking is not very common across the whole country, but it became more popular in Jakarta during COVID-19. Many people started using bicycles for commuting because they wanted exercise and to avoid crowded public transport. As a result, local bike lanes and shops saw increased demand.

× Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child and I used to ride it often, but because since I parked outside of my home, it got stolen and I never ride a bike since then. So yeah, it's a shame.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child and I used to ride it often, but because I parked it outside my home, it was stolen and I haven't ridden a bike since then. So yeah, it's a shame.

Multiple tense errors: 'because since' is redundant and incorrect — choose one ('because' or 'since'); use 'parked it' to include object; passive past 'it was stolen' is correct for the event; 'I never ride a bike since then' mixes present simple with a past time reference — use present perfect with 'since' (I haven't ridden) to link past event to present. Suggestion: simplify causal phrasing (e.g., 'because I parked it outside my home') and use present perfect for actions continuing to present.

× Uh, I don't know about uh, in my country in general, but in Jakarta, uh, there are a few people who use bike to go to the office.

✓ Uh, I don't know about my country in general, but in Jakarta there are a few people who use bikes to go to the office.

Problems: unnecessary preposition 'about' with 'my country' is awkward here — say 'about my country' can be okay but 'about uh, in my country' is redundant; more importantly 'use bike' needs plural 'bikes' or the article 'a bike' — use plural 'bikes' for general statements. Also remove extra commas and filler words. Suggestion: say 'in my country' or 'about my country' (not both) and use plural for countable nouns when speaking generally.

× And it really got popular when it was COVID.

✓ And it really became popular during COVID.

'got popular' is informal but acceptable; more accurate is 'became popular'. Also use preposition 'during' with 'COVID' (short for the COVID-19 pandemic) rather than 'when it was COVID.' Suggestion: use 'during the COVID-19 pandemic' or 'during COVID' and prefer 'became popular' for clearer past-state change.

× People use bike instead of motorbike or cars and.

✓ People used bikes instead of motorbikes or cars.

Tense mismatch: the student referred to a past period (COVID), so the verb should be past 'used'. Also plural forms: 'bikes' and 'motorbikes' or 'motorcycles' and 'cars'. The sentence ends with 'and.' which is incomplete—remove it. Suggestion: match the past context by using past tense and correct plural nouns: 'People used bikes instead of motorbikes or cars.'