Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is understandable but lacks clarity, correct grammar, cohesion and concise structure. Aim to: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question. 2) Use 1–2 supporting sentences with specific details (what happened, when, and how you felt). 3) Use correct verb tenses and avoid repetition. 4) Keep it to no more than 4–5 sentences. Example linking words: “because”, “after”, “so”, “which”.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. However, I once had an accident and broke my left leg, so I stopped riding for a long time. After that I felt embarrassed and avoided riding in front of others. Because of that experience, I was afraid to ride for a while.

Sugerencia: Your response is short and unclear, with grammar errors and vague reasons. To improve: 1) Give a direct yes/no or short opinion first. 2) Provide 1–2 clear reasons with specific details or examples (e.g., traffic, cost, health). 3) Use linking words like “because”, “so”, or “for example”. 4) Use correct noun-verb agreement and avoid repetition. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many people ride bikes because they are cheap and convenient for short trips, especially in crowded cities. For example, students and workers often cycle to save money on transport and to avoid traffic.

× Yes, I have once a time and I really bad moment.

✓ Yes, I had a bike once and I had a really bad time.

The student used 'have' (present) but the question asks about childhood (past); change to past tense 'had'. Word order and choice were incorrect: 'once a time' should be 'once' or 'once upon a time', and 'really bad moment' should be 'really bad time'. Use correct noun collocation 'bad time'. Suggestion: use simple past for past experiences and common collocations (had a bike, had a bad time).

× I really have a bad moment easier that's at this for this bicycle because I I had broken my left leg left leg and I was shy and I really, really, really hate crying and lose.

✓ I had a bad experience with that bicycle because I broke my left leg, and I was shy; I really hated crying and losing.

This sentence has multiple structure problems. Tenses are inconsistent: 'have' should be past 'had'; 'had broken' can be simplified to past 'broke' for a past event. Repetition 'left leg left leg' and filler words removed. 'Hate crying and lose' mixes present tense and base verb; matching past emotion requires 'hated crying and losing'. Also punctuation and clause linkage needed (use commas and conjunctions). Suggestion: keep tense consistent (simple past) and use parallel verb forms (hated crying and losing).

× Yeah, it's intense because of the Chinese are starting walking a little age because of the economy is really, really, really bad and the choice are cannot.

✓ Yes, it's common because people in China are starting to walk more as they get older due to the economy being very bad, and some cannot afford other choices.

Multiple tense and agreement issues. 'It's intense' is unnatural; use 'common' or 'popular'. 'The Chinese are starting walking a little age' is ungrammatical—use 'people in China are starting to walk more as they get older' or 'are starting to walk at a younger age' depending on meaning. 'Because of the economy is... ' should be 'because the economy is...' or 'due to the economy being...'. 'The choice are cannot' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and word order; correct to 'some cannot afford other choices' or 'there are limited choices'. Suggestion: simplify sentences, keep subject-verb agreement, and use correct prepositions/conjunctions ('because', 'due to').