Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, avoid repetition, and correct basic grammar and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, correct plural and article use ("most kids", "my own bike") and simplify confusing phrases ("learning at first was difficult, but I improved with practice").

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. Like most children, I had my own small bike, and my father taught me how to ride it. At first learning was difficult, but with practice I became confident riding on our neighborhood streets.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Fix grammar ("bicycle was", "important in Vietnamese people's lives", "less popular now") and use examples or causes (more cars, public transport). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid fillers like "uh".

Ejemplo: When I was young, bicycles were very important in Vietnamese people's lives because many families could not afford cars. However, nowadays they are less popular because more people use motorbikes and cars and cities have better public transport.

× Like other most of kids I also I also have my own mic when I was young and my bike is the small one and my father had taught me to ride.

✓ Like most other kids, I also had my own bike when I was young. My bike was a small one, and my father taught me to ride.

Multiple subject-verb agreement and tense problems: 'most of kids' should be 'most other kids' or 'most kids' (word order and article missing) and requires plural agreement. 'I also I also have' is repetitive and present tense 'have' conflicts with 'when I was young' (past time), so change to past 'had'. 'mic' is a typo for 'bike'. 'my bike is the small one' uses present 'is' with past context; change to past 'was' and remove 'the' before 'small one'. 'my father had taught me' uses past perfect unnecessarily; simple past 'taught' is correct. Suggestion: ensure noun phrase order, use past tense consistently for past events, and avoid redundant words.

× Advanced learning is very difficult but after experience.

✓ Learning advanced skills was very difficult at first, but it became easier with experience.

The original lacks a clear subject and correct verb forms. 'Advanced learning' is awkward and unclear; rephrase to 'learning advanced skills'. 'is very difficult' mismatches past context; use past 'was'. 'after experience' is incorrect prepositional/phrase use; use 'with experience' or 'after gaining experience'. Also add 'at first' and 'it became easier' to express contrast. Suggestion: choose appropriate verb tense for time reference and use correct prepositional phrases.

× I think when I was young my uh, bicycle is a very import, very important in our Vietnamese people life.

✓ I think when I was young, the bicycle was very important in the lives of Vietnamese people.

Mixes past time 'when I was young' with present tense 'is'. Change to past 'was'. 'a very import, very important' contains a typo and redundant phrase; 'important' suffices. 'in our Vietnamese people life' has incorrect noun phrase and article use; correct to 'in the lives of Vietnamese people' or 'in Vietnamese people's lives'. Suggestion: match tense to time reference, fix typos, and use natural noun phrases for possession.

× But nowadays, uh, everything become more modern and by is now is uh, not popular.

✓ But nowadays everything has become more modern, and bicycles are not as popular now.

Pronoun/word errors and verb forms: 'everything become' needs present perfect 'has become' to show change up to now. 'by' is a typo for 'bike' or 'bicycle' and 'is now is uh, not popular' is ungrammatical repetition; replace with plural 'bicycles are not as popular now' since general statement about bikes uses plural. Suggestion: use correct noun 'bicycle/bikes', appropriate tense (present perfect for changes over time), and plural agreement for general statements.