Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid filler words and pronunciation errors, and use linking words to add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verbs (had, rode) and plural/agreement (parents were). Keep answer within 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was in high school, and I rode it frequently to visit friends. Because my parents were often busy, riding the bike was a convenient and inexpensive way for me to travel short distances.

Sugerencia: Give a direct, present-tense opinion, then support it with two clear, specific reasons linked logically. Fix tense consistency and incomplete phrases, replace vague fillers with precise vocabulary (e.g., 'too hot', 'heavy traffic', 'air conditioner', 'sweaty'). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words (for example, because, therefore).

Ejemplo: I don't think bicycles are very popular in Thailand. Because the climate is hot and humid and many people prefer cars with air conditioning for comfort, cycling is less common, especially for longer journeys.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child). The student used present tense 'have' incorrectly. Use past tense 'did' to match the time reference. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× I had one like when I was in. High school, I used to write it a lot because umm, when my parents was not there umm, if I want to travel to my friend.

✓ I had one when I was in high school. I used it a lot because when my parents were not at home and I wanted to visit my friend, I would ride it.

This sentence has multiple issues: incorrect sentence breaks, inappropriate verb choice 'write' instead of 'ride', tense mismatches, and subject-verb agreement. 'Write' is a wrong verb; context requires 'ride'. 'Was' should be 'were' to agree with plural subject 'parents'. The conditional and past reference require past tense 'wanted' and a past habit marker 'would' or 'used to'. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× I had one like when I was in. High school, I used to write it a lot because umm, when my parents was not there umm, if I want to travel to my friend.

✓ I had one when I was in high school; I used it a lot because when my parents were not at home and I wanted to travel to my friend's place, I would ride it.

Use 'in high school' without an extra period. Use 'at home' instead of 'there' for clarity. Use 'travel to my friend's place' or 'visit my friend' to be natural. Maintain past tense 'wanted' to match 'had' and 'used'.

× when my parents was not there

✓ when my parents were not there

The subject 'parents' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'were' rather than singular 'was'.

× No, it wasn't a popular choice here in Thailand because in Thailand we usually because it's hot here.

✓ No, it wasn't a popular choice here in Thailand because it's hot here.

The original repeats 'because' and includes a redundant clause. Simplify to one clear cause. Also ensure tense matches: 'wasn't' is acceptable when speaking about general past perception, but since general present preference is being discussed, present 'isn't' could also be used; here we keep 'wasn't' to follow student's original.

× And so we usually use like a car which just has an AC instead of riding a bike because when we ride a bike in tropical weather like this, we get on a lot of.

✓ So we usually use a car with air conditioning instead of riding a bike because when we ride a bike in tropical weather like this, we get very hot and sweaty.

Problems: colloquial filler 'like' and 'just' are unnecessary; 'has an AC' is better as 'with air conditioning'; 'we get on a lot of' is incomplete and unclear. Replace with 'we get very hot and sweaty' to convey the intended meaning. Maintain present tense for general habits.