Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and articles, avoid filler words (umm). Add one specific supporting detail (e.g., where you rode or who taught you) and use a linking word if needed. Keep to 2–4 sentences and fix errors such as "I've had" → "I had" or "I've had a bike since I was...", "a really fan" → "really a fan" or better "a big fan".

Ejemplo: I had a bike since I was about three or four years old. I was a big fan of riding outdoors, especially around the park near my home, because exploring new streets felt like an adventure. As a result, cycling became my main way to get to friends' houses and school.

Sugerencia: Clarify your view and correct unclear or incorrect phrases. Avoid vague fillers and the incorrect phrase "require you sell yourself." Use linking words (However, Recently, For example) and give a specific reason or example (e.g., rise of cars, improved public transport, bike lanes). Stick to 2–4 sentences and use accurate vocabulary like "electric cars" and "e-bikes."

Ejemplo: About ten years ago, bicycles were much more popular in my country. However, recently their use has declined because more people use electric cars and improved metro services; for example, many commuters now choose e-scooters or subways for convenience.

× I was a really fan of riding bikes outdoors.

✓ I was really a fan of riding bikes outdoors.

The original word order places the adverb 'really' before the article+noun phrase 'a fan', which sounds unnatural. This is an adjective/adverb placement issue best categorized as correcting the present participle context of 'riding' and word order. Move 'really' to modify the adjective phrase properly ('really a fan'). Suggestion: Place adverbs like 'really' before the adjective phrase they modify: 'I was really a fan...'.

× It's felt like discovering mysteries to me, and it's really fun to have a mode of transport that I can use anytime I want.

✓ It felt like discovering mysteries to me, and it was really fun to have a mode of transport that I could use anytime I wanted.

The sentence mixes present perfect/continuous 'It's felt' with a past narrative about childhood. For consistent past tense narration, use simple past 'It felt' and 'it was', and use 'could' and 'wanted' to match past perspective. This is a tense consistency issue; change verbs to past forms to match the rest of the sentence. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent in storytelling: use past tense throughout when describing past experiences.

× Umm, I think about 10 years ago they were quite a popular mode of transportation.

✓ About 10 years ago, I think they were quite a popular mode of transportation.

The original placement of 'I think' interrupts the time phrase and causes awkward word order. Also 'they were quite a popular mode' is acceptable but smoother with the time clause fronted. This is primarily a sentence structure/word order issue within present-tense comment about past time. Suggestion: Place time expressions at the start or next to the verb for clarity: 'About 10 years ago, I think they were...'.

× However, over the past several years with the development of electronic cars, subways and uh, electronic bicycles, they are not as popular since umm, they require you sell yourself to move around when you ride them.

✓ However, over the past several years, with the development of electric cars, subways and electric bicycles, they have not been as popular because you have to pedal to move around when you ride them.

Multiple problems: 'electronic cars' is incorrect collocation; use 'electric cars'. Pronoun 'they are not as popular since they require you sell yourself' is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is that bikes require you to propel/pedal; use 'you have to pedal' or 'you have to power yourself'. Also tense should be present perfect 'have not been as popular' for a change continuing to present. This involves incorrect pronoun use, verb choice, and tense. Suggestion: Use correct collocations ('electric cars'), correct verb for the action ('pedal' or 'propel'), and present perfect for trends continuing to now: 'they have not been as popular because you have to pedal when you ride them.'