Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g. possession and tense), and avoid irrelevant or confusing details (the gift was for you, not your mom). Use one or two supporting details with linking words and limit to 3–4 short sentences. Watch pronunciation of hesitation fillers ("umm").

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I received a pink bicycle for my birthday when I was about eight. At that time most of my friends also had bikes, so I persuaded my mother to buy one for me. I loved it because it let me ride to the park with my friends.

Sugerencia: Clarify and tighten your sentence structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples with linking words (for example, such as, furthermore). Correct word choice and grammar ("bikes are popular" not "bites are riding bikes"). Reduce hesitations and break into two sentences for clarity.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many delivery workers use bicycles, children ride to school, and some older people cycle for exercise, so you can see bikes everywhere.

× Umm yes, I had a bike when I was young and I remember that is a unique birthday gift for my mom because at the time most of my friends had a bike and I bagged my mom for that so she bought it for me and it was a beautiful pink.

✓ Umm yes, I had a bike when I was young and I remember that it was a unique birthday gift from my mom because at the time most of my friends had bikes and I begged my mom for one so she bought it for me and it was a beautiful pink one.

Multiple past-tense references require past tense verbs and consistent phrasing. 'I remember that is' should be 'I remember that it was' (past tense and correct pronoun). 'Birthday gift for my mom' is incorrect: the gift was from the mom, so use 'from my mom'. 'Most of my friends had a bike' — 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match 'most'. 'I bagged my mom' is incorrect verb; correct is 'I begged my mom'. Also add 'one' after 'pink' to complete the noun phrase. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout and use correct verb choices and noun agreement.

× Yes, I think bites are riding bikes is very common in my country that not only people who deliver food, but also children going to school, some elderly riding bike for umm, physical exercise.

✓ Yes, I think riding bikes is very common in my country; not only people who deliver food, but also children going to school and some elderly people ride bikes for physical exercise.

The sentence has pronoun and word choice problems and awkward structure. 'I think bites are riding bikes' is incorrect — likely meant 'I think riding bikes'. Remove extraneous words. Use a semicolon or conjunction to link clauses. 'Some elderly riding bike' lacks a subject and plural forms — use 'some elderly people ride bikes'. Maintain parallel structure: 'not only... but also...' should connect comparable elements. Suggestion: simplify to 'I think riding bikes is very common in my country; not only people who deliver food, but also children going to school and some elderly people ride bikes for physical exercise.'

× So it's very common to see.

✓ So it's very common to see people riding bikes.

The original sentence 'So it's very common to see.' is incomplete and lacks the object of 'see'. Adding the present participle phrase 'people riding bikes' clarifies what is commonly seen. Suggestion: include the object after 'see' to complete the thought.