Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Work on grammatical accuracy, clarity and organization. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (use past tense consistently), replace unclear words ("a foul from my bike") with precise descriptions (e.g. "I kept falling off").

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, after about two years my parents sold it because I couldn't ride safely and kept falling off, so they were worried about my safety.

Sugerencia: Be more precise and use appropriate vocabulary (bikes vs motorcycles). Give a clear reason with a linking word and a specific example. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "learn a bike force." Use accurate terms such as "motorcycle" and explain cultural context briefly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think two-wheel transport is very popular in Indonesia. For example, many people ride motorcycles for daily travel because they are affordable and convenient in traffic, and young riders often learn to ride early.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child, but after two years my parents sold my bike because I couldn't ride my bike and I was a foul from my bike. So yeah, my parents was afraid and sold my bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but after two years my parents sold it because I couldn't ride it and I fell off it. So yeah, my parents were afraid and sold the bike.

Errors: 'have' with 'when I was a child' should be past tense 'had' (Present tense issue, ID 6). 'I was a foul from my bike' is incorrect word choice and structure; correct is 'I fell off it' (sentence structure error and verb usage). 'my parents was' violates subject-verb agreement for plural subject; should be 'my parents were' (subject-verb agreement, but flagged here as Present tense issue because tense/form of verb is incorrect). Suggestions: Use past tense consistently for past events (had, fell, were). Replace awkward phrase 'I was a foul from my bike' with 'I fell off it' and use pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition.

× Yes, I think so because I live in Indonesia and I think Indonesia most most of Indonesian are riding a motorcycle.

✓ Yes, I think so because I live in Indonesia and most Indonesians ride motorcycles.

Errors: Repeated word 'most most' and incorrect noun form 'Indonesian' used where plural noun is needed; quantifier placement and form are wrong (Incorrect use of quantifiers, ID 14). 'are riding a motorcycle' is awkward general statement; use simple present 'ride motorcycles' for habits. Suggestions: Use 'most Indonesians' for the group and 'ride motorcycles' to describe a general habit.

× So you know when you want to ride the motorcycle, you need to learn a bike force.

✓ So, you know, when you want to ride a motorcycle, you need to learn how to ride a bike.

Errors: 'learn a bike force' is incorrect phrase; missing verb structure 'learn how to' and wrong noun 'force'. This is a problem with gerund/verb phrase formation and word choice (Verb + -ing form, ID 8). Also article use 'the motorcycle' changed to 'a motorcycle' for general statement. Suggestions: Use the structure 'learn how to ride' or 'learn to ride' plus correct object 'a bike'.