Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make your answer slightly longer and more natural by adding a brief topic sentence and one supporting detail (where you work or what you do). Use a linking phrase if you add more information. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I'm working at a private accounting firm at the moment. I mainly handle bookkeeping and monthly reports, so I spend most of my day preparing financial statements.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and clearly with a topic sentence stating where you studied, then add one or two concise supporting details (name of city or university, and a short reason or description). Avoid fillers and repetition; use linking words like 'and' or 'because' correctly.

Ejemplo: I graduated from the National University in my hometown, Ulaanbaatar, Mongolia. I studied economics there because the university has a strong program in business and finance.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion in one sentence and follow with a specific reason using a linking word such as 'because' or 'since'. Avoid incoherent comparisons; decide which place you mean and explain why briefly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think studying in Shanghai is a good choice because it has many excellent universities and plentiful academic resources. For example, there are frequent seminars and strong industry links that benefit students.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear statement (yes/no) then give one or two specific suggestions with reasons, using linking words like 'first' and 'also'. Be concise and avoid hesitation words ('uh').

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like some changes. First, teachers could adapt their teaching methods to different students' levels so weaker students get more support; also, more practical workshops would help students apply theory to real situations.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, confident statement about your plans and one specific reason or detail about the subject or course you want to take. Use correct wording (e.g., 'financial subjects' -> 'finance') and avoid fillers.

Ejemplo: In the next three years I plan to pass the professional exam and pursue further studies in finance. I want to focus on financial analysis because I enjoy working with financial data and want to develop skills for a career in investment analysis.

× I'm working currently.

✓ I'm currently working.

Word order is awkward; adverb 'currently' should come before the main verb or after the auxiliary. Place 'currently' before 'working' for natural English: 'I'm currently working.' This keeps present continuous tense and improves fluency.

× Well, and because I I have had a. Graduate from university for six years and I studied in my hometown which is heart of in normal Mongolia and.

✓ Well, I graduated from university six years ago and I studied in my hometown in the center of Inner Mongolia.

Multiple issues: incorrect tense/form 'have had a. Graduate' should be simple past 'graduated' with a time expression 'six years ago' (Past tense issue). Also word order and prepositions were wrong; use 'in my hometown' and 'in the center of Inner Mongolia' for correct preposition and noun phrase. Keep consistent past tense when describing completed past events.

× I studied in my hometown which is heart of in normal Mongolia and.

✓ I studied in my hometown, which is in the heart of Inner Mongolia.

Preposition order was incorrect: use 'in the heart of' to indicate central location. Also 'Inner Mongolia' is the correct name, not 'normal Mongolia.' This fixes preposition and noun usage.

× Actually I I want to recommend you to go to. The, uh, whole heart to study compared with the Shanghai, I think it's a good place to study in Shanghai, uh, with so many knowledge and.

✓ Actually, I would recommend you go to the city center to study. Compared with Shanghai, I think Shanghai is a good place to study because it offers a lot of learning opportunities.

Original has broken sentences and unclear structure. Use 'would recommend you go to' (avoid unnecessary 'to' after recommend) and split ideas into two sentences. 'So many knowledge' is uncountable; use 'a lot of learning opportunities' instead. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?

✓ Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Modal usage 'Would you like' is appropriate for polite questions about preferences.

× Definitely, uh, there are many, uh, places that I would like to give some advice, Uh, first, I think the uh. Teachers. They all can be uh, adjust based on the uh, every student and give the corresponding uh suggestion and besides.

✓ Definitely, there are many things I would like to suggest. First, I think teachers should adjust their teaching based on each student and give corresponding suggestions.

Problems include incorrect pronoun/reference and fragmented sentences. 'Places that I would like to give some advice' is wrong—use 'things' or 'suggestions.' 'They all can be adjust' mixes pronouns and verb forms; use 'teachers should adjust' or 'they can adjust.' Also 'every student' fits better as 'each student.' This corrects pronoun use and sentence flow.

× In the next three years, I plan to pass the exam and go forward to study financial subjects.

✓ In the next three years, I plan to pass the exam and go on to study finance subjects.

Use 'go on to study' or 'go on to study finance' for natural future plans. 'Financial subjects' is acceptable but 'finance subjects' or 'finance' is more natural. The tense 'plan to' correctly expresses future intent; adjust verb phrase for idiomatic usage.

× Uh, because I'm good at uh, calculating the financial, uh, data and prepared financial.

✓ Because I'm good at calculating financial data and preparing financial reports.

Original misplaces adjectives and uses wrong forms. Use 'financial data' (adjective before noun) and parallel verbs 'calculating' and 'preparing.' 'Prepared financial' is incomplete; specify 'preparing financial reports' or 'financial statements.' This fixes adjective placement and verb form.