Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “I’m a freelancer and a blogger.”), avoid fillers (uh, um), correct unclear phrases (“flu fluency” is confusing), and give one or two specific supporting details (what your business does or your follower number stated correctly). Use linking words if adding detail.

Ejemplo: I’m a freelancer and I run my own online business as a blogger. For example, I create content about lifestyle and I currently have about 20,000 followers on social media.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence then specific reasons with linking words. Remove hesitations and use correct expressions (“the IELTS exam”, “I practice speaking every day”). Add one concrete example of study activity.

Ejemplo: I study at home because I’m preparing for the IELTS exam. I practice speaking every day and watch online lessons and interviews, which help me improve pronunciation and vocabulary.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct answer, then give concise, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar. For example, say why home is suitable and mention conditions that help your study (quiet corner, resources).

Ejemplo: Yes, it’s a good place to study because I need to practice speaking and pronunciation. Also, at home I can set up a quiet corner with recordings and a mirror to practice speaking aloud.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and state specific change(s) you want. Use linking words to explain why and how the change would help. Fix grammar: “There are many children around who make noise and disturb me, so I’d like it to be quieter.” Propose a realistic solution.

Ejemplo: Yes. There are often children playing nearby who make a lot of noise, so I’d like the study area to be quieter. For example, I could use noise-cancelling headphones or ask family members to keep noise down during my practice sessions.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence about your plan, then explain reasons and steps. Use correct noun phrases (“a master’s degree in psychology”), avoid redundancy, and clarify how you will achieve it (save money, apply for scholarships).

Ejemplo: I plan to study abroad to complete a master’s degree in psychology because I want to help people with mental health issues. To achieve this, I will prepare for tests, apply for scholarships, and save money to cover tuition and living costs.

× Neither of them. I'm a freelance now, I build my own business and uh, I'm a flu fluency.

✓ Neither. I'm a freelancer now; I run my own business and I'm a fluent speaker.

Student used 'Neither of them' incorrectly when answering a direct question; 'Neither' suffices. 'Freelance' is an adjective or verb; the noun is 'freelancer'. 'I build my own business' is awkward for current ongoing work — use 'I run my own business'. 'I'm a flu fluency' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'I'm a fluent speaker'. Suggestions: use appropriate noun forms and idiomatic verbs: 'freelancer', 'run my own business', 'a fluent speaker'.

× Umm, I have uh, 2020 thousands follows.

✓ I have about 20,000 followers.

The student combined digits and 'thousands' incorrectly. Use a single numeric expression: '20,000' or 'twenty thousand'. Also 'follows' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'followers'. Suggestion: say 'I have about 20,000 followers' or 'I have around twenty thousand followers'. Use 'about' for approximation.

× Recently I've been studying at home because I'm going to take a IELTS uh, English exam, so I'm studying English at home.

✓ Recently I've been studying at home because I'm going to take an IELTS English exam, so I've been studying English at home.

The student mixed simple present and present perfect continuous. Use present perfect continuous ('I've been studying') to show recent ongoing action. Also article before 'IELTS' requires 'an' because IELTS begins with a vowel sound. Suggestion: keep tense consistent: 'I've been studying... because I'm going to take an IELTS exam.'

× I practice uh, speaking every day and uh, I uh, watch a lot of video online.

✓ I practice speaking every day and I watch a lot of videos online.

'Practice' followed by gerund 'speaking' is correct; keep without extra fillers. 'Video' should be plural 'videos' when referring to many. Suggestion: remove fillers and use plural nouns for countable items.

× I think it's very useful.

✓ I think it's very useful.

Sentence is grammatical; no change required. (No error from provided list.)

× Yes, I think so because what I study is language.

✓ Yes, I think so because what I study is language.

Grammatically acceptable; although more natural is 'because I study languages' or 'because I study language'. Not corrected because it does not violate listed error types.

× Language is about speak and so I have I need to have a good place to practice pronunciation and and speak.

✓ Language is about speaking, so I need a good place to practice pronunciation and speaking.

Use gerund 'speaking' after 'about' and parallel gerunds 'pronunciation and speaking' or 'pronunciation and speaking skills'. Remove duplicated 'I have I need'. Suggestion: use parallel structure and gerunds for activities.

× So I think home is good place to study.

✓ So I think home is a good place to study.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'good place'. Suggestion: use 'a good place' for singular countable nouns.

× Yes, I yes, I hope so.

✓ Yes, I hope so.

Redundant repetition 'Yes, I yes, I' should be simplified to 'Yes, I hope so.' Suggestion: avoid repeating subject unnecessarily.

× Where I study is many children around, so they always make noise, uh, uh, disturb me.

✓ There are many children around where I study, so they always make noise and disturb me.

Original sentence misorders clause; use 'There are' for existence and place. 'Disturb me' should be connected with 'and'. Suggestion: use 'There are many children around where I study' or 'Many children play around my study place'.

× So, uh, I help my study place well, more quiet.

✓ So I want my study place to be quieter.

'I help my study place well, more quiet' is ungrammatical. Likely intent: express desire for quieter place. Use comparative 'quieter' and infinitive structure 'to be quieter' or 'I want it to be quieter'. Suggestion: say 'I want my study place to be quieter'.

× I hope one day I can study abroad.

✓ I hope one day I will be able to study abroad.

'I hope one day I can' is understandable but more natural is 'I will be able to' to express future capability. Suggestion: use 'will be able to' or 'I can' with clearer time reference: 'I hope that one day I can study abroad' also acceptable.

× I want to get a psychology master so I can help people to fix their mental health issues.

✓ I want to get a master's degree in psychology so I can help people with their mental health issues.

'A psychology master' is incorrect. Use 'a master's degree in psychology' or 'a master's in psychology'. Also use 'help people with their mental health issues' rather than 'help people to fix'. Suggestion: say 'get a master's degree in psychology' and 'help people with their mental health'.

× This is my dream and I want to go I go afford it.

✓ This is my dream and I want to be able to afford it.

Original contains repetition 'I want to go I go' and incorrect expression 'afford it' without 'be able to'. Use 'be able to afford it' to express ability. Suggestion: 'I want to be able to afford it' or 'I want to afford it someday'.