Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and use clearer sentence structures. Start with a direct topic sentence (I am a student), then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid informal contractions like 'wanna' and incorrect plurals (homeworks). Use linking words to connect ideas (because, so).

Ejemplo: I am currently a grade nine student and I will start high school next year. I feel a bit stressed because I’m worried about having more difficult homework and moving toward university too quickly. Therefore, I want to enjoy my childhood a little longer before focusing fully on my studies.

Sugerencia: Give a clear main sentence about the school and then provide a specific reason. Correct grammar (an International School, because, university). Keep it short and coherent with linking words.

Ejemplo: I study at an international school in Hong Kong. I chose this school because it offers an international curriculum and will help me prepare for university study in Australia in the future.

Sugerencia: State your opinion first and then give two specific supporting reasons. Use varied vocabulary (diverse, multicultural) and correct small errors (people not peoples; Americans, Europeans). Use linking words like because and for example.

Ejemplo: Yes, it is a good place to study because Hong Kong is modern and very multicultural. For example, I often meet students from America and Europe, which gives me a chance to learn about different cultures and improve my English.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use a clear reason and one example. Fix grammar (familiar with the place; I don't really want to change it; I am not a person who likes change). Use linking words like because and so.

Ejemplo: I wouldn’t change my school because I’m already familiar with it and it took me time to adapt. For instance, I know the teachers and routines, so I prefer stability rather than making frequent changes.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear statement of your plan (I want to study dentistry). Use correct terms (dentistry, dentist) and past tense where needed. Give a concise reason and a brief plan (study hard, take relevant subjects). Avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: I plan to study dentistry at university because I have always admired how dentists help people and I enjoyed watching them as a child. To reach this goal, I will focus on science subjects and work hard in school so I can apply to a reputable dental program.

× Currently I'm a student and I am a grade nine student which I'm going to go to high school next year.

✓ Currently I'm a student and I am in grade nine; I'm going to high school next year.

The original contains awkward phrasing ('a grade nine student which I'm going to go to high school'). Use 'in grade nine' to indicate current grade and separate the clause about going to high school. This fixes sentence structure and tense consistency. Suggestion: Use clear clause boundaries and common collocations (in grade nine, go to high school).

× So I'm kind of stressed about it because I don't want to go to the university so fast.

✓ So I'm kind of stressed about it because I don't want to go to university so quickly.

'The university' is unnecessary when speaking generally; use 'go to university'. 'So fast' is informal and awkward; 'so quickly' or 'too quickly' is more appropriate. Keep present tense for current feelings about a future event. Suggestion: Use 'go to university' and 'too quickly/so quickly' for clarity.

× I still wanna be a kid and I'm afraid of more stressful homeworks.

✓ I still want to be a kid and I'm afraid of more stressful homework.

Use 'want to' instead of informal 'wanna'. 'Homework' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'homeworks'. 'More stressful' is acceptable but ensure 'homework' remains singular/uncountable. Suggestion: Use 'homework' (uncountable) and formal contractions 'want to' in test speech.

× Well currently I study in Hong Kong in a International School cause in the future I plan to go to Australia to have university so yes.

✓ Well, currently I study in Hong Kong at an international school because in the future I plan to go to Australia to attend university.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound: 'an international school'. Preposition for studying at a school is 'at', not 'in' (though 'in' is possible for a city). Use 'because' instead of informal 'cause'. 'Attend university' is the correct collocation rather than 'have university'. Suggestion: Use articles correctly ('an international'), correct prepositions ('at an international school'), and standard verbs ('attend university').

× Well it is cause Hong Kong is a modern city which is really globalized so you can communicate with people from various countries like America and someone from Europe.

✓ Well it is, because Hong Kong is a modern, very globalized city, so you can communicate with people from various countries like the United States and countries in Europe.

Replace informal 'cause' with 'because'. 'America' is ambiguous; use 'the United States' or 'the Americas'; 'someone from Europe' is awkward; better to say 'people from Europe' or 'countries in Europe'. Also 'really globalized' is acceptable but 'very globalized' or 'highly globalized' is more natural. Ensure plural agreement for 'people'. Suggestion: Use precise country names and plural forms when referring to multiple people.

× So you can get a chance to communicate with peoples from with different cultures and experience different things.

✓ So you can get a chance to communicate with people from different cultures and experience different things.

'Peoples' is incorrect in this context; 'people' is the plural of person. Remove the extra preposition 'with' after 'from'. Suggestion: Use 'people from different cultures'.

× Well, actually I'm really familiar with the where the place I am, so I don't really, I won't really want to change a place 'cause you need some time to adapt it and get familiar with everything.

✓ Well, actually I'm really familiar with the place where I am, so I don't really want to change it because you need time to adapt and get familiar with everything.

Original has redundant words and incorrect pronoun placement ('the where the place I am'). Use 'the place where I am' or 'where I am' alone. 'I won't really want to change a place' is awkward; use 'I don't really want to change it'. 'Adapt it' is incorrect; say 'adapt' (no object) or 'adapt to it'. Replace informal 'cause' with 'because'. Suggestion: Simplify word order and use correct pronouns ('change it') and verbs ('adapt' or 'adapt to it').

× So I'm not really a person who like to change a lot.

✓ So I'm not really a person who likes to change a lot.

Subject-verb agreement: 'who' refers to 'a person' (singular), so the verb must be 'likes' (third person singular). Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with the noun: 'person who likes'.

× Well, I plan to major in the field of dentist 'cause when I was young I love watching dentists working, so that was one of my dream.

✓ Well, I plan to major in dentistry because when I was young I loved watching dentists work, so that was one of my dreams.

Use the correct noun 'dentistry' for the field, not 'dentist'. Replace informal 'cause' with 'because'. Use past tense 'loved' for a past habit. 'Dentists work' is the correct verb form; 'working' is less natural here. 'One of my dream' should be plural: 'one of my dreams'. Suggestion: Use field names (dentistry), correct tense (loved), and pluralize 'dreams'.

× I wish I could be a dentist in someday, so I will study hard to achieve my goal and I wish I can be a doctor that can help others in the future.

✓ I hope I can become a dentist someday, so I will study hard to achieve my goal and help others in the future.

'In someday' is incorrect; use 'someday'. 'I wish I could be' is used for hypothetical present; use 'I hope I can become' for future aspiration. Use consistent future intent: 'I will study hard'. 'I wish I can' should be 'I hope I can' or 'I want to'. Also 'be a doctor that can help others' is redundant if aiming to be a dentist; 'become a dentist who can help others' is acceptable, but simplified to 'help others' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'hope' for future desires and 'someday' without 'in', and maintain consistent verbs for plans.