Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và mở rộng câu bằng cách nêu thêm chi tiết ngắn gọn (ví dụ: chuyên ngành hoặc năm học). Tránh tiếng ậm ừ và câu quá ngắn; mở đầu trực tiếp rồi bổ sung thông tin hỗ trợ với liên từ nếu cần.

Ejemplo: I'm currently a student, majoring in digital marketing in my third year. I enjoy the course because it combines creative and analytical skills.

Sugerencia: Giảm sử dụng tiếng đệm (umm, uh) và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (the + university, located in). Nói rõ tên và vị trí, thêm một mệnh đề hỗ trợ ngắn gọn dùng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

Ejemplo: I study at Hua Seng University in Ho Chi Minh City, which is known for its strong business and marketing programs.

Sugerencia: Sắp xếp câu theo cấu trúc rõ ràng: câu chủ đề + hỗ trợ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (facilities, programs are, doesn't work for them). Nên nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao bạn thấy tốt và thừa nhận quan điểm trái chiều ngắn gọn.

Ejemplo: Personally, I think it's a good place to study because the facilities are modern and the teaching programs are well-structured. However, I understand that some students may not find it suitable if they prefer a different learning style.

Sugerencia: Trình bày rõ ràng vấn đề và đề xuất cụ thể. Sửa ngữ pháp (improve the quality of the facilities, when it rains water leaks into classrooms). Dùng liên từ để kết nối lý do và cảm xúc của bạn.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like them to improve the facilities' quality. For example, some classrooms leak when it rains, which disrupts lessons and makes me uncomfortable.

Sugerencia: Tránh lặp từ và tiếng đệm; sắp xếp ý theo trình tự: mục tiêu học tập rồi kế hoạch nghề nghiệp. Dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng và chi tiết hơn về hành động cụ thể (ví dụ: internships, skills to gain).

Ejemplo: My plan is to work hard at university to gain strong knowledge and practical skills, then look for a job in digital marketing, possibly starting with an internship to build experience.

× I am a student currently.

✓ I am currently a student.

The adverb 'currently' should be placed before the noun phrase to follow normal English word order. Place adverbs of time (currently) before the main noun or after the verb 'be' for clearer structure. Suggestion: 'I am currently a student.'

× I'm studying at the Hua Seng University, which is one of the university located, uh, in Ho Chi Minh City.

✓ I'm studying at Hua Seng University, which is one of the universities located in Ho Chi Minh City.

Use no definite article with many proper university names (drop 'the' before Hua Seng University). 'One of the universities' requires plural 'universities' to match 'one of the'. Also use 'located in' without a comma before location. Suggestion: 'I'm studying at Hua Seng University, which is one of the universities located in Ho Chi Minh City.'

× Umm personally I think it a it has a really wonderful facility.

✓ Umm, personally, I think it has really wonderful facilities.

Remove extra words and adjust noun number: 'facility' should be plural 'facilities' when speaking generally; 'it has really wonderful facilities' is natural. Also place commas around 'personally'. Suggestion: 'Personally, I think it has really wonderful facilities.'

× Also the the the teaching programs is also and the training program is also really good for me.

✓ Also, the teaching programs and the training program are really good for me.

Subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'the teaching programs and the training program' requires plural verb 'are'. Remove redundant 'also' and repeated 'the'. Suggestion: 'Also, the teaching programs and the training program are really good for me.'

× But some people think it is not worked for them so it is pens.

✓ But some people think it does not work for them, so it is disappointing.

Incorrect verb form 'worked' and unclear word 'pens'. Use present simple 'does not work' to express general truth. 'Pens' is wrong; likely meant 'problem' or 'disappointing'. Suggestion: 'But some people think it does not work for them, so it is disappointing.'

× Yes, I think they could improve the facilities to be more quality because sometimes when the like when the weathers goes rains, it's dropped the water into the classroom.

✓ Yes, I think they could improve the facilities to be of better quality because sometimes when it rains, water gets into the classroom.

Pronoun and article issues: 'they' is acceptable for the university but 'to be more quality' is incorrect — use 'of better quality'. 'The weathers goes rains' is wrong; say 'when it rains'. Passive 'it's dropped the water' is incorrect; use 'water gets into' or 'water enters'. Suggestion: 'Yes, I think they could improve the facilities to be of better quality because sometimes when it rains, water gets into the classroom.'

× So I really don't like it.

✓ So I really do not like that.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'it' can be clarified to 'that' referring to the problem. Use full form 'do not' in formal speaking. Suggestion: 'So I really do not like that.'

× Umm, uh, I think I would like do my best, do do my best at the university study career, then I need to find a job, uh, in the digital marketing major.

✓ Umm, I think I would like to do my best in my university studies, and then I need to find a job in digital marketing.

Missing 'to' after 'would like' and awkward phrase 'university study career'. Use 'do my best in my university studies' and link ideas with 'and then'. 'In the digital marketing major' should be 'in digital marketing' or 'in the field of digital marketing'. Remove duplicate 'do'. Suggestion: 'I would like to do my best in my university studies, and then I need to find a job in digital marketing.'

× So yeah, it is my future plan.

✓ So yes, that is my future plan.

'Yeah' is informal; use 'yes' in clearer speech. 'It is my future plan' is acceptable but 'that is my future plan' is clearer referring to previous sentence. Suggestion: 'So yes, that is my future plan.'