Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce pauses and repeated words, correct minor grammar errors, and make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Pronunciation of job title and removing double words will improve clarity.

Ejemplo: I’m currently working as a deputy field officer in technical care at a government organization called the Special Bureau. In this role, I write code to automate repetitive tasks, so my colleagues can focus on more complex technical challenges.

Sugerencia: Use past tense consistently for completed studies, remove filler words (uh, umm), and avoid repeating phrases. Give one or two specific supporting details linked clearly to the topic sentence.

Ejemplo: I completed my undergraduate studies at VIT University in Chennai. The university had a strong learning environment and offered many opportunities, such as industry projects and student clubs, which supported students’ ambitions.

Sugerencia: Avoid excessive hesitation and repeat information more precisely. Use linking words (for example, and, additionally) to connect points. Provide one concrete example of an opportunity to support the claim.

Ejemplo: Yes, it’s a fantastic place to study. In addition to strong placement support, the university partners with several foreign institutions, allowing students to join exchange programmes and gain international experience.

Sugerencia: Finish sentences fully and avoid trailing off. State the main point clearly, then give a specific example and a brief reason why the change matters. Use linking words like however or for example.

Ejemplo: I don’t have many suggestions, but I would improve hygiene standards. For example, in one building the restrooms are poorly maintained, which affects student comfort and could be solved by more frequent cleaning and better facilities management.

Sugerencia: Be concise and add one specific reason or goal for pursuing further study. Use a clear topic sentence followed by a linking phrase that explains the motivation or expected outcome.

Ejemplo: I plan to pursue an MBA to develop my management and communication skills. This qualification will help me move into leadership roles where I can manage teams and projects more effectively.

× In my job I write code to automate repetitive task which helps my colleagues focus on more much more complex tasks.

✓ In my job I write code to automate repetitive tasks which helps my colleagues focus on much more complex tasks.

The noun 'task' should be plural ('tasks') because 'repetitive' refers to multiple items; also 'more much more' is redundant and incorrect word order; use 'much more complex' to modify 'tasks'. Suggestion: use plural for countable nouns when referring to multiple items and avoid redundant modifiers.

× I'm currently working as a a deputy field officer in technical care in a government organization named Special Bureau.

✓ I'm currently working as a deputy field officer in technical care at a government organization named Special Bureau.

'a a' is a typographical duplication; 'in technical care' is acceptable but 'at a government organization' is the correct preposition for employment location. Use single article and correct preposition 'at' for institutions.

× In my job I write code to automate repetitive task which helps my colleagues focus on more much more complex tasks.

✓ In my job I write code to automate repetitive tasks which helps my colleagues focus on much more complex tasks.

Preposition issue partly: original sentence had redundancy 'more much more' and needs correction to 'much more complex'. Also 'in my job' is acceptable; primary correction is modifier order and plurality. (See previous correction.)

× I did my undergraduate studies in VIT University UH which it is located in UH Chennai.

✓ I did my undergraduate studies at VIT University, which is located in Chennai.

The clause 'which it is located' is ungrammatical because 'which' already refers to the university and does not require the subject 'it'; also use 'at' for studying at a university and remove filler 'UH'. Suggestion: use a relative clause 'which is located' without an extra subject and use correct preposition 'at'.

× It has a umm great learning environment and provides ample opportunity for students UH and it is quite supportive to uh the ambitions of students.

✓ It has a great learning environment and provides ample opportunities for students, and it is quite supportive of students' ambitions.

Avoid filler 'umm' and 'uh'; 'opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' when general; use 'supportive of' rather than 'supportive to'; possessive 'students' ambitions' is clearer. Suggest removing fillers and matching noun number and preposition with 'supportive of'.

× Yes, it is a fantastic place to study. Uh, the school provides lot of opportunities to the students in the form of placements and, uh, higher education as well.

✓ Yes, it is a fantastic place to study. The school provides a lot of opportunities to students in the form of placements and higher education as well.

Add 'a' before 'lot' ('a lot of'); remove unnecessary 'the' before 'students' in this general statement; remove filler 'uh'. Suggest using 'a lot of opportunities' for general plural noun phrases.

× Uh, my school is connected with, uh, multiple, uh, other foreign schools so that we can, uh, do our exchange study.

✓ My school is connected with multiple foreign schools so that we can do exchange studies.

Remove fillers; 'other' is redundant when 'foreign schools' is clear; 'exchange study' should be pluralized to 'exchange studies' or phrase 'exchange programs' to match count. Suggest succinct phrasing: 'do exchange studies' or 'participate in exchange programs'.

× I don't have much to suggest as changes in my school, but what I would like to change is a little more emphasis on hygiene would go a long way.

✓ I don't have many suggestions for changes at my school, but I would like there to be a little more emphasis on hygiene.

Original mixes two structures incorrectly. Use 'many suggestions' (countable) or 'much to suggest' is awkward; 'for changes at my school' is correct preposition; rephrase second part to 'I would like there to be a little more emphasis' to express desire. Suggest rephrasing to a clearer structure.

× In my university in a certain building the restrooms are not well maintained.

✓ In my university, in one building, the restrooms are not well maintained.

Tense is fine but word choice: 'a certain building' is awkward in spoken English; use 'one building' and add commas for clarity. Suggest clearer noun phrase and punctuation.

× I would like.

✓ (Complete sentence) I would like them to be cleaned and maintained regularly.

'I would like.' is an incomplete sentence lacking an object or clause specifying what is wanted (sentence without a verb complement). Provide a complete thought: e.g., 'I would like them to be cleaned and maintained regularly.' Suggest always finishing 'I would like' with an infinitive or noun phrase.

× So I am planning to do an MBA.

✓ So I am planning to do an MBA.

This sentence is correct. 'Planning to do an MBA' correctly uses the infinitive; no change needed.