Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make your answer more concise and use clear sentence boundaries. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid run-on sentences and minor grammar errors (e.g., “full-time”, “I teach children aged 6 to 11”).

Ejemplo: I work as a full-time English teacher at a primary school. Specifically, I teach children aged 6 to 11, and most of my students are boys, so they tend to be energetic and talkative.

Sugerencia: Organize chronologically with clear linking words and avoid filler words like “uh.” Use past tense consistently and combine related information into one or two concise sentences. Add one specific detail about why you chose those subjects if possible.

Ejemplo: I studied in Hong Kong for kindergarten and primary school, and then I moved to Canada to complete high school and university. At university I majored in sociology and media studies because I was interested in how media influences society.

Sugerencia: Provide a clearer comparison and use linking phrases (e.g., “On the one hand… On the other hand…”). Correct tense consistency and avoid mixing present and past without reason. Give one concrete example of how each place helped you.

Ejemplo: On the whole, both places were good to study: Hong Kong helped me develop discipline through strict school routines, whereas Canada encouraged creativity through project-based learning and open discussions.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct answer and then give one precise supporting reason. Reduce redundancy and tighten sentences. Use linking words like “for example” correctly and avoid repeating obvious phrases.

Ejemplo: No, I wouldn't change much. For example, at the University of Toronto the facilities are very accessible — the library is open 24 hours, so I can study there late at night when I need to.

Sugerencia: Be clearer and correct vocabulary mistakes (e.g., “Master of English” or “a master’s degree in English”; “qual” → ‘qualifications’). Use a topic sentence, then one specific reason or plan with a linking word. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I am currently studying English language teaching at Metropolitan University. After that, I plan to do an additional year to earn a master’s degree in English because it will improve my professional qualifications and help me design better lessons.

× I am a full time English teacher in a primary school I teach aged 6 to 11.

✓ I am a full-time English teacher at a primary school; I teach children aged 6 to 11.

The original is a run-on sentence missing proper punctuation and prepositions. Use a hyphen with compound adjective 'full-time', use the preposition 'at' for institutions, and add a semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses. Also specify 'children' for clarity.

× I went to Hong Kong primary and kindergarten.

✓ I attended primary school and kindergarten in Hong Kong.

Use 'attended' for participating in school and place the location 'in Hong Kong' after the noun phrase. The original word order and verb choice are unnatural in English.

× After that I moved to Canada to finish my high school and university.

✓ After that, I moved to Canada to finish high school and university.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'my' before 'high school and university' is unnecessary; native speakers often omit it. Add a comma after the introductory phrase 'After that.'

× Uh, in university I studied sociology and media studies.

✓ While at university, I studied sociology and media studies.

'In university' is acceptable but 'while at university' is more natural. This keeps the past tense 'studied' consistent with the time frame.

× It is a good place to study in Hong Kong.

✓ It was a good place to study in Hong Kong.

The student refers to a past experience of studying there, so past tense 'was' should be used to match the time frame.

× It helped me to maintain discipline and in Canada I get to develop my creativity.

✓ It helped me to maintain discipline, and in Canada I got to develop my creativity.

The first clause is past tense 'helped', so the second clause should also be past 'got' to maintain consistent tense. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× I studied in University of Toronto where the facilities are very accessible to all the students.

✓ I studied at the University of Toronto, where the facilities were very accessible to all students.

Use 'at the University of Toronto' with the definite article and preposition 'at.' Also change tense to past 'were' to reflect past study and remove unnecessary 'the' before 'students.'

× So for example, if I want to study in the library, it is open 24 hours, so I can just stay there overnight.

✓ For example, if I wanted to study in the library, it was open 24 hours, so I could just stay there overnight.

Maintain past tense consistency with previous statements: change present 'want'/'is'/'can' to past 'wanted'/'was'/'could.' Also remove the redundant 'So' at the start.

× I am currently studying English language for teaching at Metropolitan University and then after that I am planning to add one more year to get a Master of English because it helps me to develop my qual.

✓ I am currently studying English language teaching at Metropolitan University, and after that I plan to add one more year to get a Master of English because it will help me develop my qualifications.

Several fixes: use the noun phrase 'English language teaching' or 'English for teaching,' replace 'am planning to' with simple present 'plan' for future arrangement, change 'helps me to develop my qual' to 'will help me develop my qualifications' for clarity and correct abbreviation. Remove redundant 'then' and ensure parallel structure.