Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and add a brief supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repeating "love" and correct minor grammar (use contractions or proper verb forms). For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason why you enjoy studying.

Ejemplo: I'm a student at a local high school. I enjoy studying there because the teachers are supportive and the curriculum is challenging, which helps me prepare for university.

Sugerencia: Give a clearer, grammatically correct description and include one specific detail (use linking words like "and" or "because"). Avoid hesitations and repetitions such as "which" twice.

Ejemplo: I attend Hazan High School for Gifted Students, which is well known in my area because it has a strong academic record and a supportive learning environment.

Sugerencia: Provide a concise affirmation followed by two specific reasons, using linking words like "because" or "and." Fix grammar ("teachers here care about students"). Avoid exaggerated phrases like "best ever."

Ejemplo: Yes, it is. The school is friendly and well-organized, and the teachers here genuinely care about students' progress, which makes learning enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Speak more clearly and eliminate fillers. State the change directly, then give a specific reason and a brief consequence using linking words like "because" or "so." Correct grammar ("there isn't enough space").

Ejemplo: Yes. I would like the school to expand the parking lot because it's currently too small, so students often struggle to find a place to park when classes finish.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer: start with a clear statement of your plans, then give specific details about the course and why you chose it. Remove hesitations and correct vocabulary (e.g., "major in logistics and supply chain" and "popular field").

Ejemplo: I plan to study economics at university and major in logistics and supply chain management because it's a growing field in Vietnam and I find the subject both practical and interesting.

× Currently I'm still a student and I am studying at a local high school.

✓ Currently I am a student studying at a local high school.

Redundant progressive forms and contractions can make the sentence clumsy. Use 'I am a student studying...' to state current status smoothly. Suggestion: avoid 'still' with 'currently' and combine verbs for clarity.

× I really love my school and love studying very much.

✓ I really love my school and enjoy studying very much.

Using 'love' twice is repetitive and stylistically weak. 'Enjoy' is a better collocation with 'studying'. Maintain present simple to describe regular feelings.

× I am studying at a school called Hazan High School for gifted students.

✓ I study at a school called Hazan High School for Gifted Students.

Present simple ('I study') is more natural for regular attendance; 'I am studying' is acceptable but changing to simple form matches typical descriptive usage. Also capitalize proper noun consistently.

× It is a school which will which is well known, which is good environment and many excellent achievements.

✓ It is a well-known school with a good environment and many excellent achievements.

Original has redundant and incorrect relative clause 'which will which is' and lacks parallel structure. Use 'well-known' (hyphenated adjective), 'with' to connect qualities, and parallel noun phrases. Suggestion: simplify clauses and maintain parallel elements.

× The environment is friendly and the teachers at here are caring about student.

✓ The environment is friendly and the teachers here care about the students.

'At here' is incorrect; use 'here'. 'Caring about student' has wrong verb form and missing plural article: use 'care about the students' or 'are caring toward the students'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct article/plural for 'students'.

× I want our school to change the parking lot.

✓ I want our school to improve the parking lot.

'Change the parking lot' is grammatically possible but unclear; replace with 'improve the parking lot' for natural meaning. Pronoun 'our' is fine. This is primarily a lexical clarity issue but corrected to a common collocation.

× Umm, the parking lots are quite small so if you go let school you will be uh, faced with overcrowded students and don't have place to park.

✓ The parking lots are quite small, so if you go to school you will face overcrowding and not have a place to park.

Multiple issues: missing preposition 'to' after 'go', 'let' is incorrect; 'faced with overcrowded students' is unidiomatic—use 'face overcrowding' or 'be faced with overcrowding'. 'Don't have place' needs subject agreement and article: 'not have a place'. Use consistent tense and subject-verb forms.

× I want to be get in a economic uh university and umm I have chosen my module is uh log logistic and supply chain which is umm an popular mahjong in Vietnam.

✓ I want to get into an economics university, and I have chosen the module Logistics and Supply Chain, which is a popular major in Vietnam.

Several errors: 'be get in' is ungrammatical—use 'get into' or 'be admitted to'. Use 'an economics university' (or 'an economics program'); 'a economic' should be 'an economics' (article + noun form). 'I have chosen my module is' is wrong structure—use 'I have chosen the module Logistics and Supply Chain'. 'log logistic' corrected to 'Logistics'. 'an popular mahjong' is wrong words: 'mahjong' is a game; intended 'major' and 'a popular major'. Ensure articles ('a' vs 'an') match following sounds and nouns are correct.

× I really like it.

✓ I really like it.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple and needs no change; it appropriately expresses current preference.