Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct small grammar and clarity issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and fix tense/word choice (e.g. “in year 10 and 11” not “your 1011”). Use one or two supporting details maximum.

Ejemplo: I’m a student in eighth grade and I’ll move to Year 9 next term. I’ll have important exams in Year 10 and Year 11, so I’m already preparing for them.

Sugerencia: Provide a clearer, smoother answer with correct vocabulary (use "principal" or "head" rather than "CEO" for schools) and avoid filler words. Give one or two specific details about the school (size, years, or your experience) and use linking words for coherence.

Ejemplo: I study at Oxbridge Academy International School in Buckworm. It’s a large school founded in 2014, and I’ve been a student there since 2018, so I know the teachers and facilities well.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and improve grammar and word choice (e.g., "expat teachers" and "easier" → "more effective"). Start with a clear opinion, then give one specific reason and an example. Use a linking word to connect reasons.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think it’s a great place to study because the teachers are experienced and many are expat teachers, which exposes us to different teaching styles and native English accents.

Sugerencia: Be concise and neutral while giving a clear suggestion. Avoid strong informal words like “disgusting” and reduce fillers. State the problem, give a specific example (food poisoning), and suggest a solution or desired change.

Ejemplo: The school is generally good, but I’d like the canteen food improved. Several students have had food poisoning, so I suggest stricter hygiene checks and fresher menu options.

Sugerencia: Clarify your career goal and explain the study path with accurate vocabulary (e.g., "psychology" requires social science/biology courses). Remove repetition and correct phrases like "study of science" and "start hardly." Give one or two concrete steps you will take.

Ejemplo: I want to become a psychologist, so I plan to focus on biology and psychology courses at school. I’ll study consistently and prepare thoroughly for the Year 10 and Year 11 exams to meet university entry requirements.

× Currently I'm a student. I'm an eighth grade student and I'm right now moving to Year 9.

✓ Currently I'm a student. I'm an eighth-grade student and I'm moving to Year 9 right now.

Use of present continuous 'moving to Year 9' is fine but word order and hyphenation for 'eighth-grade' needed correction. Place 'right now' after the verb for natural adverb placement. Hyphenate compound adjective 'eighth-grade' before 'student'.

× So next year I will have exams and then in your 1011 I have exams.

✓ So next year I will have exams and then in Year 10 and Year 11 I will have exams.

Original mixes tenses and contains typos 'your 1011'. Use consistent future tense 'will have' for planned future events and correct 'Year 10 and Year 11'.

× Currently I'm a student of Oxbridge Academy, uh, International School in Buckworm.

✓ Currently I'm a student at Oxbridge Academy International School in Buckworm.

Use 'at' rather than 'of' for attending a school. Remove unnecessary comma. Use institution name without extra commas.

× Uh, it is a pretty big school and uh, the CEO is Nailer Zaiba and the school has been created and has been working since 2014 and I've been studying there since 2018.

✓ It is a pretty big school. The CEO is Nailer Zaiba, and the school has been operating since 2014. I've been studying there since 2018.

'Has been created' is awkward; use 'was founded' or 'has been operating/since' depending on focus. 'Has been working' is unnatural for a school. Break into shorter sentences for clarity.

× Personally, I believe that. Personally I believe that it is a really nice educational complex.

✓ Personally, I believe that it is a really nice educational complex.

Duplicate phrase 'Personally I believe that' is redundant. Combine into one clear sentence. No plural/article error otherwise.

× The education there, the teachers there, everything is amazing and there are expats teacher.

✓ The education there, the teachers, everything is amazing, and there are expat teachers.

'Expats teacher' is incorrect: use plural noun 'teachers' and adjective form 'expat' before it. Also punctuation improved for clarity.

× So this makes education way more easier.

✓ So this makes education much easier.

'More easier' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'much easier' or just 'easier'. Avoid combining 'more' with comparative '-er'.

× Uh, the school is amazing how, although there are some things that I would like for them to change, For example, the food there, uh, the food is pretty disgusting to be honest.

✓ The school is amazing overall, although there are some things I would like them to change. For example, the food is pretty disgusting, to be honest.

Original has awkward word order 'amazing how' and punctuation issues. Reorder to 'amazing overall' and remove extra commas; use 'I would like them to change' for natural phrasing.

× Uh, and a lot of kids got food poisoning, but overall I'd say it's OK.

✓ A lot of kids got food poisoning, but overall I'd say it's OK.

Sentence is acceptable; kept past tense 'got' for completed events. Removed filler 'Uh, and'.

× In the in the future, I would like to become a psychologist.

✓ In the future, I would like to become a psychologist.

Duplicate 'in the' is an error. Remove repetition for correct article and phrase.

× So definitely I would need to study of science because it is a crucial part for psychology.

✓ So definitely I would need to study science because it is a crucial part of psychology.

'Study of science' is incorrect preposition use; say 'study science'. Use 'part of psychology' not 'part for psychology'.

× Science teaches a lot and will definitely prepare me for psychology.

✓ Science teaches a lot and will definitely prepare me for studying psychology.

'Prepare me for psychology' is unclear; better 'prepare me for studying psychology' or 'prepare me for a career in psychology'. This clarifies the object of preparation.

× So yes, in the future I'm planning to start hardly because we also have important exams in year 10 and year 11.

✓ So yes, in the future I'm planning to start studying hard because we also have important exams in Year 10 and Year 11.

'Start hardly' is wrong—'hardly' means 'barely'. Use 'study hard' or 'start studying hard'. Capitalize 'Year 10' and 'Year 11'.