Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 첫 문장인 “Yes, I did.”는 자연스럽지만, “such as” 뒤에 불필요한 마침표가 있고 “making crabs”는 문맥상 “making crafts”가 더 적절합니다. 활동을 나열할 때는 “such as making crafts and gardening”처럼 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 또한 어떤 활동이었는지, 그 활동을 하면서 무엇을 배웠는지 한 가지 구체적인 세부 내용을 덧붙이면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I took several after-school classes, such as making crafts and gardening. I especially enjoyed gardening because I liked growing flowers and learning how to take care of plants.

Sugerencia: 의견은 제시했지만 “try a lot of things as they can try”는 반복적이고 문법적으로 어색합니다. “People should try as many different things as they can” 또는 “People should try a variety of activities”라고 표현하세요. 그 이유와 구체적인 결과를 연결어와 함께 추가하면 좋습니다. 예를 들어 “because”로 이유를 설명하고 “For example”로 사례를 제시하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can. This allows them to discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone who tries cooking, sports, and music may eventually find an activity they are truly passionate about.

× Yes I did. I joined a lot of classes after school such as. Making crabs and. Gardening.

✓ Yes, I did. I joined a lot of classes after school, such as making crafts and gardening.

The phrase such as must be followed directly by the examples, so the periods after such as and and are incorrect. The examples should also be parallel: making crafts and gardening. The word crabs appears to be a vocabulary or spelling error for crafts, so it has been corrected for natural meaning.

× I believe people should try a lot of things as they can try.

✓ I believe people should try as many different things as they can.

When expressing the maximum number of things someone can try, use the structure as many + plural noun + as + subject + can. The phrase a lot of things as they can try is not grammatically appropriate, and try is unnecessarily repeated at the end.