Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly with a complete topic sentence, such as “Yes, I did.” Then explain when and where you played volleyball. Improve grammar by saying “I had the opportunity,” “especially volleyball,” and “during our break time.” Use the past tense consistently because you are describing your childhood, and avoid sentence fragments such as “In our break time.” You could also replace “it makes our bond” with the more natural phrase “it strengthened our friendship.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I had the opportunity to play volleyball at school, especially during our breaks. My friends and I enjoyed playing together, and it helped us relax and strengthened our friendship.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence, for example, “Yes, I think people should try different activities.” Avoid excessive hesitation and unclear expressions such as “bonesy zomping” and “like this.” Use the correct structure “if I get the chance” rather than “if my life gives me a chance to do like this any activities.” Add a specific reason, such as gaining confidence or discovering new interests, and use the correct spelling and pronunciation of “bungee jumping.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this can help them discover new interests and become more confident. For example, if I had the chance, I would definitely try bungee jumping. It would be frightening, but it would also be an exciting experience.

× Yes, I had opportunity in my school when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had an opportunity at school when I was a child.

The singular countable noun opportunity requires the indefinite article an. Use an before words that begin with a vowel sound, such as opportunity.

× It is especially in volleyball.

✓ It was especially volleyball.

The student is describing an experience during childhood, so the past tense was is more appropriate than the present-tense verb is.

× In our break time.

✓ We played volleyball during our breaks.

The original expression is a sentence fragment because it has no subject or verb. A complete sentence needs a subject, such as we, and a verb, such as played.

× My friends and I love to play volleyball and somehow it makes our bond and it it really helps us to relax.

✓ My friends and I loved playing volleyball, and it strengthened our bond and really helped us relax.

Because the student is talking about childhood, the past-tense forms loved and helped are needed. The repeated pronoun it should also be removed. After help, the base verb relax is natural, so to is unnecessary here.

× I would love to say that uh, people will try different things in their life.

✓ I would say that people should try different things in their lives.

The question asks whether people ought to try different things, so should expresses advice more accurately than will. Will describes a future event rather than a recommendation.

× People will try different things in their life.

✓ People should try different things in their lives.

The plural subject people is normally matched with the plural possessive noun lives when referring to the lives of multiple people.

× But if my life give me a chance to do like this any activities, I will try Bongi jumping for sure.

✓ But if my life gives me a chance to do activities like these, I will try bungee jumping for sure.

The subject my life is singular, so the present-tense verb must be gives, not give. In a first conditional sentence, the if-clause uses the present tense and the main clause uses will.

× If my life give me a chance to do like this any activities, I will try Bongi jumping for sure.

✓ If my life gives me a chance to do activities like these, I will try bungee jumping for sure.

The phrase like this any activities has an incorrect word order. Use activities like these, with the noun activities followed by the comparison phrase like these.