Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời chưa trả lời trực tiếp và còn nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, chẳng hạn “my parent” nên là “my parents”, “they was” nên là “they were”, và “I just stay” nên là “I just stayed”. “Rate 6” có lẽ là “Grade 6”; hãy dùng cách diễn đạt này rõ ràng hơn. Em nên bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời trực tiếp như “Not really” hoặc “No, I didn’t have many opportunities”, sau đó giải thích rằng bố mẹ bận nên em thường ở nhà. Ngoài ra, cần giảm các từ ngập ngừng như “umm”, “uh” và tránh lặp lại ý “stay at home”.

Ejemplo: Not really. My parents were usually busy with work, so they often left me at home when they went out. As a result, I did not have many opportunities to try new activities until I reached Grade 6.

Sugerencia: Em đã nêu quan điểm rõ ràng bằng “Absolutely” và đưa ra lý do, nhưng câu trả lời có một lỗi nghiêm trọng về ý nghĩa: “people just live once a week” nên là “people only live once”. Cần sửa “every opportunities” thành “every opportunity” và tránh cụm từ không tự nhiên “develop their jobs”; có thể dùng “develop their careers” hoặc “improve their skills”. Em nên sắp xếp ý mạch lạc hơn bằng các từ nối như “because”, “for example” và đưa ra một ví dụ cụ thể về việc thử hoạt động mới giúp phát triển kỹ năng hoặc xây dựng các mối quan hệ.

Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. Since people only live once, they should make the most of every opportunity to try something new. For example, learning a new skill or joining a club can help them develop their careers, make new friends, and become more confident.

× At that time my parent was really busy with their job, so they just allowed me to stay at home.

✓ At that time my parents were really busy with their jobs, so they allowed me to stay at home.

The context indicates more than one parent, so parent should be parents and job should be jobs. The verb was must also change to were because the plural subject parents requires a plural verb.

× They was out.

✓ They were out.

The subject they always takes the plural verb were in the past tense, not was.

× Since I was just a kid until, like, Grade 6, I just stay at home.

✓ From when I was a kid until, like, Grade 6, I just stayed at home.

The speaker is describing a period in the past, so stay must be changed to the past-tense form stayed. From ... until is also the natural structure for describing a period that began at one time and ended at another.

× People just live once a week.

✓ People only live once.

Only is more natural than just when expressing the meaning that life happens one time. Once a week means every week, which changes the intended meaning, so it should be removed.

× They need to use every opportunities they have.

✓ They need to use every opportunity they have.

Every is followed by a singular countable noun, so opportunities must be changed to the singular form opportunity.

× To, uh, develop their maybe their jobs or their friendships or their lives.

✓ To develop their careers, friendships, or lives.

The repeated phrase their maybe their interrupts the sentence structure. Remove the repetition and place the items in a clear parallel list. Careers is also more natural than jobs in this context.