Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer begins directly and includes relevant details about your parents, school competitions, sports, and extracurricular activities. However, there is a missing full stop or linking word after “young,” and the final sentence is incomplete after “my interests and.” Complete your idea by explaining what you discovered, and organize the response into clear sentences. You could also add one specific example of an activity and what you learned from it. Keep the answer to about three or four complete sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. My parents were very supportive, so they encouraged me to try different activities when I was young. For example, I took part in school sports competitions and joined a drama club. Although I did not continue with all of them, these experiences helped me discover that I enjoyed working in a team and performing in front of people.

Sugerencia: You give a balanced opinion, which is effective, but there are several grammar and phrasing problems: “de develop” should be “develop,” “comes their ways” should be “comes their way,” and “they focus on the” is incomplete. Use a clearer contrast with “However” and finish by stating that people should focus on activities that suit their goals. Add a specific example, such as trying different hobbies before choosing one to pursue seriously. Avoid repeating “different things” and “a variety of activities” without adding new information.

Ejemplo: Yes, to a certain extent. Trying different activities can help people discover their strengths, interests, and valuable life skills. However, they do not need to do everything that comes their way, because that can be overwhelming. It is better to explore several options and then focus on the activities that suit their abilities and long-term goals.

× My parents were quite supportive, so they encouraged me to try different activities when I was young I had opportunities to take part in school competitions, sports and various extracurricular activities. Although I didn't continue with all of them, I think those experiences helped me discover my interests and.

✓ My parents were quite supportive, so they encouraged me to try different activities when I was young. I had opportunities to take part in school competitions, sports, and various extracurricular activities. Although I didn't continue with all of them, I think those experiences helped me discover my interests.

The original response contains a run-on sentence because two independent clauses are joined without appropriate punctuation. The final clause ends with and but does not provide another coordinated idea, so it is incomplete. Separate the independent clauses with a full stop and remove the unnecessary conjunction at the end.

× It's better to explore a variety of activities and they focus on the.

✓ It's better to explore a variety of activities and focus on the ones that interest you.

The expression come their ways should be come their way because way is used in the singular expression come someone's way. Also, the original phrase focus on the is incomplete because the needs to be followed by a noun. Use the ones to refer to particular activities.

× However, I don't think people need to do everything that comes their ways. It's better to explore a variety of activities and they focus on the.

✓ However, I don't think people need to do everything that comes their way. It's better to explore a variety of activities and focus on the ones that interest them.

The second sentence is structurally incomplete: focus on the has no clear object, and they creates an unnecessary change in subject. After people, use focus to coordinate the verbs clearly, and complete the phrase with the ones that interest them.