Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer responds directly and includes a relevant reason, but it contains a run-on sentence and repeats the idea of being a child. Use “supportive” instead of “supporting” to describe your mother, and connect the ideas more naturally. You could also add one specific example of an activity you tried, such as a sport, musical instrument, or hobby. Keep the answer to two or three well-structured sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I was lucky to have a very supportive mother who encouraged me to try different activities. For example, I took swimming lessons and joined a school drama club, which helped me become more confident.

Sugerencia: You express a clear opinion and give a reason, but there are several grammatical problems, including “they should they had to,” “failed at many opportunities,” and “experience, have the actual experience.” Avoid repeating “try so many things” and “actual experience.” Use linking words such as “because” and “as a result” to organize your explanation, and provide a specific example of how trying different activities helps people discover their strengths. Use the present tense consistently because you are discussing people in general.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and strengths. They may fail at some things, but those experiences can teach them what suits them best. For example, someone might try several sports before realizing that they are particularly good at swimming.

× Yes, I did. I had quite a few opportunities back then when I was a child, I grew up having such a wonderful and supporting parent, especially my mom, she encouraged me to try so many things.

✓ Yes, I did. I had quite a few opportunities when I was a child. I grew up having such a wonderful and supportive parent, especially my mom. She encouraged me to try so many things.

The original response contains run-on sentences joined only by commas. Separate the independent clauses with full stops. This makes each idea clear and grammatically complete.

× I grew up having such a wonderful and supporting parent.

✓ I grew up having such a wonderful and supportive parent.

Supportive is the correct adjective because it describes a person who gives help and encouragement. Supporting usually describes an action or process, as in supporting someone.

× Yes, they should they had to try so many things, failed at many opportunities.

✓ Yes, they should try so many things and fail at many of them.

After the modal verb should, use the base form of the verb: should try. Do not use had to immediately after should. The structure should try is appropriate for giving general advice.

× Yes, they should they had to try so many things, failed at many opportunities.

✓ Yes, they should try many different things. They may fail at some of them, but they can learn from those experiences.

The original sentence combines several ideas without the necessary grammatical structure. Use separate sentences or connect the ideas with a conjunction. Also, fail at some of them is more grammatically complete than failed at many opportunities because opportunities are not normally the things that people fail at.

× They also had to experience, have the actual experience of failing and succeeding before they actually knew what's best for them.

✓ They also need to experience failure and success before they know what is best for them.

The original sentence repeats the idea of experience and incorrectly places two verb phrases together: experience, have the actual experience. Use one clear verb phrase, such as need to experience. Because this expresses a general idea, use the present forms know and is.