Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question more directly and use more natural grammar. Say “living in the United States was already a new experience” rather than “I lived in the United States that already is a new experience.” Also, use the past tense consistently and add one specific detail about the activity, such as where or when you did it.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I lived in the United States for a few years, which was already a new experience for me. In addition, my parents encouraged me to be adventurous, so I learned to ride a jet ski on a nearby lake.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion first and then explain both sides with accurate linking words. Avoid using “although” and “but” in the same sentence, and replace the vague phrase “and things” with a precise noun. Explain what “spreading it too thin” means, such as having too little time to develop real skills or enjoy each activity.

Ejemplo: I think people should try different things, but they should not overdo it. Trying new activities can broaden their perspectives and help them discover their interests. However, if they take on too many activities at once, they may not have enough time to develop any real skills or enjoy the experiences fully.

× Yes, as a child I lived in the United States that already is a new experience and on top of that my parents were very open to new experiences. So I drove jet skis in the lake.

✓ Yes, as a child I lived in the United States, which was already a new experience, and on top of that, my parents were very open to new experiences. So I drove jet skis in the lake.

The answer describes a past experience, so the verb must be in the past tense. Change is to was. The commas around which also make the additional information clearer.

× Although new experiences and trying new things broadens your perspective and deepens your understanding and things, but spreading it too thin would ruin the experience.

✓ Although new experiences and trying new things broaden your perspective and deepen your understanding of things, spreading them too thin would ruin the experience.

The subject contains two coordinated ideas, new experiences and trying new things, so plural verbs are required: broaden and deepen, not broadens and deepens. The plural pronoun them refers to new experiences and new things.

× Although new experiences and trying new things broadens your perspective and deepens your understanding and things, but spreading it too thin would ruin the experience.

✓ Although new experiences and trying new things broaden your perspective and deepen your understanding of things, spreading them too thin would ruin the experience.

Although and but should not be used together in the same clause because they are both contrast markers. Use although without but, or use but without although. Here, although is retained and but is removed.