Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 질문에 직접 답했고, 활동의 구체적인 예와 이유를 제시하여 내용이 풍부합니다. 다만 “ice skating, piano and violin”은 병렬 구조가 어색하므로 “ice skating and playing the piano and violin”처럼 표현하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. 또한 “I think I had the opportunity”는 다소 불필요하게 조심스러운 표현이므로 “I had the opportunity”라고 간결하게 말할 수 있습니다. 부모님의 영향이나 가장 기억에 남는 활동을 한 문장 더 구체적으로 설명하면 답변이 더욱 효과적입니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had the opportunity to try several activities as a child, including ice skating and playing the piano and violin. I especially enjoyed ice skating because it was exciting and different from my daily routine. My parents encouraged me to practise regularly, which helped me develop discipline and coordination.

Sugerencia: 의견은 제시했지만, “have to try,” “as much as they can,” “along their life journey”가 반복되고 부자연스럽습니다. “People should try a variety of activities throughout their lives”처럼 명확한 주제문으로 시작하세요. “I try to do new thing”은 “I try new things” 또는 “I try to take on new challenges”로 고치고, “it can improve our”처럼 문장이 중단되지 않도록 “quality of life”나 “personal growth”로 완성해야 합니다. 또한 “because” 뒤에 이유를 하나 분명히 설명하고, 짧은 예를 덧붙이면 답변의 논리성과 유창성이 향상됩니다. 말할 때 “umm”을 줄이고 3~4개의 완전한 문장으로 답하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities throughout their lives. Exploring new things helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who joins a sports club may become healthier and make new friends. It can also make life more interesting and help people become more confident.

× I think people have to try a lot of activities as much as they can.

✓ I think people should try as many different activities as they can.

Activities are countable nouns, so use many rather than much. The structure as many ... as they can expresses the idea of trying the greatest possible number of activities. Should is also more natural than have to when giving advice.

× along their life journey

✓ throughout their lives

Throughout their lives is the natural expression for describing something that happens during the whole period of a person's life. Along their life journey is understandable, but it is not the usual expression in this context.

× I try to do new thing

✓ I try to do new things

The speaker is referring to more than one new activity or experience, so the plural noun things is required. The expression try to do is grammatically correct.

× and try do some challenges

✓ and try to take on some challenges

The verb try must be followed by to plus the base form of a verb when expressing an attempt: try to do. Take on challenges is also the natural English collocation. The conjunction and correctly connects this idea to the previous verb phrase.

× important to improve our life level

✓ It is important to improve our quality of life.

The original phrase is missing a main finite verb and a subject. Use the structure It is important to plus the base verb. Quality of life is the natural expression; life level is not normally used in English.

× and also it can improve our.

✓ and it can also improve our quality of life.

The sentence is incomplete because improve requires an object, but our is only a possessive determiner and cannot stand alone. Also is placed before the main verb can improve in this sentence. Repeating quality of life makes the meaning complete and clear.