Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly and avoid repetition. Use natural phrases such as “I had several opportunities” instead of “I did have many instances,” and say “extracurricular activities” and “homework,” not “extra curricula curricular activities” and “homeworks.” Add one specific detail about who encouraged you or which activity you enjoyed most. Also, complete the final sentence because the current answer is unfinished.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents encouraged me to take part in extracurricular activities, such as cycling, swimming, and skating, instead of spending all my time reading or doing homework. I especially enjoyed swimming because it helped me become more confident and physically active.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion in a more natural form: “Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities.” Avoid the awkward phrase “try doing things as many as they can”; use “try as many different activities as possible.” Develop your reason with a specific result or example, and connect your ideas with linking words such as “because” and “for example.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I think people should try as many different activities as possible. It can help them discover new interests and reduce stress because they have a chance to take a break from their usual routine. For example, someone who normally works indoors might enjoy joining a sports club or learning to cook.

× Yes, I did have many instances of trying new things or doing extra curricula curricular activities rather than just reading books or doing homeworks.

✓ Yes, I had many opportunities to try new things or take part in extracurricular activities rather than just read books or do homework.

The phrase extra curricula curricular is not grammatically correct. The adjective extracurricular should be used before activities. The correction also uses the parallel verb forms read and do after rather than.

× Yes, I did have many instances of trying new things or doing extra curricula curricular activities rather than just reading books or doing homeworks.

✓ Yes, I did have many instances of trying new things or doing extracurricular activities rather than just reading books or doing homework.

Homework is an uncountable noun, so it does not normally take the plural form homeworks. Use homework when referring to schoolwork in general.

× People should try doing things as many as they can.

✓ People should try as many different things as they can.

The structure as many ... as requires a plural countable noun after many. Here, things should be placed after many: as many different things as they can.

× There is no harm in trying new things and actually I think it is for the mental well being of individuals and they can relax a bit.

✓ There is no harm in trying new things. In fact, I think trying new things is good for people's mental well-being because it helps them relax.

The original sentence joins several ideas with and, making the structure unclear. Use a new sentence and because to show the relationship between the ideas. The subject trying new things is also clearer than the unclear pronoun it.