Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答の構成は明確で、具体的な活動や感情も含まれているため、内容は十分です。ただし、過去の出来事なので「want」は「wanted」にし、「because my parents wanted me to take part in them」のように文を完成させる必要があります。また、「it was so fun」はやや口語的なので、「I found it very enjoyable」や「I had a great time」とすると、より自然で効果的です。

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I took part in volunteer activities because my parents wanted me to try something new. I was nervous at first, but I gradually became more confident and had a great time helping other people.

Sugerencia: 「Yes, I think so」と直接答えた後、理由を説明しており、論理の流れは良好です。ただし、「broader horizons they can gain」は不自然なので、「the broader their horizons become」または「the more broad-minded they become」とすると自然です。また、「It is very crucial aspect」には冠詞が必要で、「It is a crucial aspect of enriching people's lives」と修正できます。理由を具体化するために、異なる活動から得られるスキルや新しい視点を一つ加えると、さらに説得力が増します。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can. The more experiences they have, the broader their horizons become, and they may discover new interests or talents. In addition, trying different activities can help them become more adaptable and confident.

× When I was a child, I participated in volunteer activities because my parents want me to take part in.

✓ When I was a child, I participated in volunteer activities because my parents wanted me to take part in them.

The main clause is in the past tense because it refers to the speaker's childhood. Therefore, want should be changed to the past-tense form wanted. In addition, take part in normally needs an object, so them is added to refer to volunteer activities.

× When I was a child, I participated in volunteer activities because my parents want me to take part in.

✓ When I was a child, I participated in volunteer activities because my parents wanted me to take part in them.

The phrase take part in is incomplete without an object in this sentence. The pronoun them refers back to volunteer activities. When using a phrasal verb or prepositional verb, check whether it requires an object.

× At the beginning I was nervous, but in the end it was so fun.

✓ At the beginning, I was nervous, but in the end, it was so fun.

The fixed expression is at the beginning, which requires the definite article the. The article is used because the speaker is referring to the beginning of the activity or experience. The commas are added for readability, but they are not the main grammar correction.

× Yes, I think so, because the more experiences people have, the broader horizons they can gain.

✓ Yes, I think so, because the more experiences people have, the broader their horizons become.

The correlative comparative structure is the more ..., the more .... The second part should contain a comparative adjective followed by a complete clause: the broader their horizons become. Also, people broaden their horizons or their horizons become broader; they do not usually gain broader horizons.

× It is very crucial aspect to enrich people's life.

✓ It is a very crucial aspect of enriching people's lives.

A singular countable noun such as aspect requires an article, so a is needed before very crucial aspect. The preposition of is more natural after aspect when it is followed by a gerund phrase. Use the plural noun lives because people's refers to multiple people, each of whom has a life.

× It is very crucial aspect to enrich people's life.

✓ It is a very crucial aspect of enriching people's lives.

The noun life should be plural because the sentence discusses the lives of people in general. The possessive form people's indicates that the noun refers to more than one person, so lives is the appropriate form.