Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly with a clear opening, such as “Yes, I did.” Avoid repetition, including “I love dancing” twice and “many in many programmes.” Use the correct preposition “good at dancing,” and say “I used to perform in many school programmes and family functions.” Add one specific detail about how you felt or what you learned from dancing. Also, “Gios” is unclear and should be removed unless it is intended to be “Yes.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I took part in dancing activities at school and often performed at family functions. I really enjoyed being on stage because it helped me become more confident. I also learned how to practise regularly and work with other performers.

Sugerencia: Your opinion is clear, but “In my opinion, I would say” is redundant, so use either “In my opinion” or “I would say.” Replace “contribute those in their life” with a natural phrase such as “apply those experiences to their lives” or “develop useful skills.” Add a specific example or result to make the answer more effective and well developed. Use a linking word such as “For example” to connect your supporting detail.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think people should try different activities because this helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone who tries volunteering, sports, or music may become more confident and learn how to work with others. These experiences can also help people make better decisions about their studies or careers.

× Gios I have and am good in dancing and I love dancing.

✓ Yes, I have, and I am good at dancing. I love dancing.

The correct preposition after good when describing an ability is at, not in. The expression is good at dancing. The word Gios appears to be a typing error for Yes.

× I used to dance many in many programmes in my school and in my family functions and I love to dance.

✓ I used to dance many times in many school programmes and at my family functions, and I love dancing.

Many must be used with a countable plural noun, so many times is required. Many by itself cannot function as an adverb meaning frequently in this sentence.

× I used to dance many in many programmes in my school and in my family functions and I love to dance.

✓ I used to dance many times in many school programmes and at my family functions, and I love dancing.

At is more appropriate for events or occasions, so we say at my family functions. In school programmes is possible, but many school programmes is more natural when referring to programmes organized by the school.

× People should try as many different things as they can because it helps them to grow and contribute those in their life.

✓ People should try as many different things as they can because these experiences help them grow and contribute to their lives.

The verb contribute is followed by the preposition to when describing something that has a positive effect, so contribute to their lives is correct. Do not say contribute those in this context.

× People should try as many different things as they can because it helps them to grow and contribute those in their life.

✓ People should try as many different things as they can because these experiences help them grow and contribute to their lives.

Those is an inappropriate pronoun here because it does not clearly refer to anything that can be contributed. These experiences clearly refers to trying different things and makes the meaning easier to understand.