Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: La respuesta es relevante y ofrece ejemplos específicos, como tocar música y practicar ballet. Sin embargo, hay varios problemas gramaticales y de naturalidad: usa “made me more responsible” y “helped me improve my posture” para hablar del pasado; di “when I was seven” en lugar de “at the end of seven”; y reemplaza “practice always” por “practise regularly” o “practise every day”. Organiza la respuesta con una idea principal y conecta los ejemplos con “also” o “in addition”.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a couple of opportunities to try new activities as a child. When I was six, I started learning to play a musical instrument, which made me more responsible because I had to practise regularly. Then, when I was seven, I took ballet lessons, and they helped me improve my posture.

Sugerencia: La idea principal es clara, pero “prove different activities” no es correcto; debes decir “try different activities” o “take part in different activities”. La segunda oración necesita un sujeto y una estructura más natural: “You may not know what you are good at unless you try different things.” Añade una razón o un ejemplo breve para desarrollar la respuesta y utiliza un conector como “because” o “for example”.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because they may discover talents they did not know they had. For example, someone who tries photography or cooking might find a new passion. Trying different things can also help people become more confident and adaptable.

× I guess when I was six I started playing music and that makes me more responsible because I had to practice always and at the end of seven I started dancing ballet and that helps me to correct my posture.

✓ I guess that when I was six, I started playing music, and that made me more responsible because I had to practice all the time. When I was seven, I started dancing ballet, and that helped me correct my posture.

The answer describes experiences that happened in the past, so the verbs describing their results should also be in the past tense: makes becomes made and helps becomes helped. Keep the verb tense consistent when narrating past events.

× I guess when I was six I started playing music and that makes me more responsible because I had to practice always and at the end of seven I started dancing ballet and that helps me to correct my posture.

✓ I guess that when I was six, I started playing music, and that made me more responsible because I always had to practice. When I was seven, I started dancing ballet, and that helped me correct my posture.

The adverb always is placed more naturally before the main verb had to practice. A useful pattern is subject + always + verb, as in I always had to practice.

× I guess when I was six I started playing music and that makes me more responsible because I had to practice always and at the end of seven I started dancing ballet and that helps me to correct my posture.

✓ I guess that when I was six, I started playing music, and that made me more responsible because I always had to practice. When I was seven, I started dancing ballet, and that helped me correct my posture.

At the end of seven is not the correct expression for referring to a person’s age. Use when I was seven or at the age of seven. The phrase when I was seven is the most natural choice here.

× You may not know you are good at if you can't try.

✓ You may not know what you are good at if you can't try different activities.

The phrase know you are good at is incomplete because the preposition at needs an object. Use the noun clause what you are good at, which means the activities or things in which you have ability. Including different activities also makes the sentence complete and clear.