Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question more directly and use more natural expressions. “Upfront to choose” is incorrect in this context; say “open to choosing” or “willing to try.” Also, “I had been the best athlete for different new sports” is unclear. Explain which activities you tried and briefly describe one specific experience. Use a clear topic sentence followed by a supporting example.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. I was especially interested in sports, so I took part in basketball, swimming, and athletics at school. For example, I joined an athletics competition and won first place in a running event, which made me more confident.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer without starting with “Because,” and avoid repeated fillers such as “uh” and repeated phrases like “when people.” The main idea is good, but the sentence is too long and difficult to follow. Use linking words such as “because” and “as a result” to organize your reasons, and provide one specific example of how trying new activities helps people understand their abilities.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and abilities. For example, someone who tries painting, sports, and volunteering may realize that they are particularly good at working with others. As a result, they can make better decisions about their hobbies or future career.

× So in my childhood, I had plenty of chances to participate in new activities and I was always upfront to choose and to try new things.

✓ In my childhood, I had plenty of chances to participate in new activities, and I was always eager to choose and try new things.

Upfront usually means honest, direct, or occurring at an early stage. It is not normally used to mean willing or enthusiastic. Use eager to, willing to, or open to before an infinitive or gerund. Also, choose and try should have a parallel structure without repeating to.

× For example, in our school I had been the best athlete for different new sports.

✓ For example, at school, I was the best athlete in several different sports.

The answer describes a past situation without referring to an earlier past event, so the simple past was is more appropriate than the past perfect had been. The past perfect is used when one past event happened before another past event.

× For example, in our school I had been the best athlete for different new sports.

✓ For example, at school, I was the best athlete in several different sports.

The usual preposition after best athlete when referring to activities or sports is in, as in the best athlete in swimming or the best athlete in several sports. The preposition for is not suitable in this context.

× Uh, absolutely yes. Because I think, uh, when people, they can, uh, when, when people, they try, uh, many things, as much as they can, uh, they will come to know themselves, their, uh, capabilities and also they will come to realize the things that, uh, they could have been better or done better.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I think that when people try many different things, they will come to know themselves and their capabilities, and they will also realize which things they could have done better.

People is already the subject of the clause, so they should not be inserted immediately after people. Avoid repeating the subject as both a noun and a pronoun in the same clause. Use either people try or they try, not people they try.

× Uh, absolutely yes. Because I think, uh, when people, they can, uh, when, when people, they try, uh, many things, as much as they can, uh, they will come to know themselves, their, uh, capabilities and also they will come to realize the things that, uh, they could have been better or done better.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I think that when people try as many different things as they can, they will come to know themselves and their capabilities, and they will also realize which things they could have done better.

Things is a countable plural noun, so use many rather than much. The correct structure is as many things as they can. Use as much as they can with uncountable nouns, such as as much information as they can.

× Uh, absolutely yes. Because I think, uh, when people, they can, uh, when, when people, they try, uh, many things, as much as they can, uh, they will come to know themselves, their, uh, capabilities and also they will come to realize the things that, uh, they could have been better or done better.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I think that when people try as many different things as they can, they will come to know themselves and their capabilities, and they will also realize which things they could have done better.

The original response contains repeated and interrupted clauses, including Because I think and when people, they can, which make the sentence structure unclear. The final clause also incorrectly combines could have been better with done better. Use a complete main clause with one clear when-clause, and say which things they could have done better.