Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答は具体性があり良いですが、文法と語順の誤り、冗長さが目立ちます。トピック文（I became a leader...）の後に、出来事の時間や理由を明確にし、文をつなぐ接続語（for example, so, because）を適切に使ってください。また、動詞の形（manage → manage）や受動・能動の一致を確認し、文を最大5文以内に収めて簡潔に述べましょう。最後にコロンや句読点で文を終える習慣をつけてください。

Ejemplo: Yes. In high school I became the leader of a film club that my senior had started. He found it difficult to run the club on his own, so I volunteered to help by organizing meetings and managing other students. This experience taught me leadership and teamwork skills.

Sugerencia: 論点は明確で妥当ですが、表現をより自然で具体的にすると高得点になります。接続詞（because, for example）を使うのは良いですが、具体例はより詳細にし、語彙を適切に選んで簡潔にまとめてください。例えば “studying new hobby” は不自然なので “learning a new hobby” 等に直しましょう。文は2〜3文で完結させ、理由→具体例→結果の順で構成すると説得力が増します。

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Trying new things gives practical learning opportunities and helps you develop useful skills. For example, learning a musical instrument or taking a part-time job can teach you discipline and communication, and ultimately broaden your perspective.

× So I decided to help him by manage other student and.

✓ So I decided to help him by managing other students.

The structure 'help by + -ing' requires the present participle (managing). 'Student' should be plural 'students' to match 'other' and general meaning. Also remove trailing 'and'. Use 'managing other students' to show the action performed to assist. Suggestions: Use 'help by + -ing' (e.g., 'help by managing'), make nouns plural when referring to more than one ('students').

× I became a leader of a film club which is made by my senior.

✓ I became the leader of a film club that was formed by my senior.

Use 'the leader' when referring to a specific position the speaker held. 'Which' is often used for non-defining clauses; here 'that' or a defining clause is better. 'Is made by' is awkward for formation in the past—use 'was formed by' (past tense) because the club existed before the speaker became leader. 'Senior' is acceptable but 'my senior' is clear. Suggestions: Use definite article 'the' for a specific role, use past tense 'was formed' for events that happened before, and prefer 'that' in defining relative clauses.

× When I was in high school I became a leader of a film club which is made by my senior.

✓ When I was in high school I became the leader of a film club that had been formed by my senior.

The sentence refers to past events: being in high school and becoming leader, so the clause describing the club's creation should use past perfect ('had been formed') to show it happened before the speaker became leader. Also changed 'a leader' to 'the leader' for the specific role and 'which is made by' to 'that had been formed by'. Suggestions: Maintain consistent past timeline by using past or past perfect where appropriate.

× For example, studying new hobby or job can broaden your perspective.

✓ For example, studying a new hobby or working in a new job can broaden your perspective.

'Studying new hobby' lacks the article 'a' before 'new hobby'. Also 'studying a job' is unnatural; use 'working in a new job' or 'learning a new skill'. The preposition 'in' is needed with 'working in a job'. Suggestions: Include articles ('a new hobby'), and choose appropriate verbs with prepositions ('working in a job').

× So I decided to help him by manage other student and.

✓ So I decided to help him by managing other students.

'Other student' should be plural 'other students' when referring to multiple classmates. The sentence likely intended plural, so adjust noun number accordingly. Suggestions: Ensure noun number matches the intended meaning; use plural when referring to more than one item or person.

× But he couldn't, he found it difficult to run it everything on his own.

✓ But he couldn't; he found it difficult to run everything on his own.

The sequence 'run it everything' is incorrect word order. Remove 'it' and place 'everything' after 'run'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to separate clauses for clarity. Verb tenses 'couldn't' and 'found' are fine together (past modal and past simple) for past events. Suggestions: Check word order ('run everything') and avoid unnecessary pronouns ('it') that cause redundancy.

× Yes I did.

✓ Yes, I did.

Add a comma after 'Yes' for natural spoken/written punctuation. While not strictly a grammar type from the list, punctuation affects sentence clarity. In spoken transcripts, comma insertion improves readability. Suggestions: Use commas after interjections like 'Yes'.

× For example, studying new hobby or job can broaden your perspective.

✓ For example, studying a new hobby or taking up a new job can broaden your perspective.

Use 'studying + noun' requires article 'a' before countable noun 'new hobby'. To express starting a job, use 'taking up a new job' or 'working in a new job'. The '-ing' form 'studying' is fine but must be paired with correct articles and parallel structure. Suggestions: Maintain parallel structure and include necessary articles.