Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng, ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không chính xác, làm người nghe khó hiểu ý chính. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (ví dụ: có hoặc không), sau đó thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể về loại hoạt động và cảm nhận của bạn. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản (for example, such as, so) để tạo khả năng liên kết giữa các ý và tránh lặp từ.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. My school organized many extracurricular activities, such as drawing clubs and nature trips, which helped me develop my creative and observational skills. For example, joining the drawing club allowed me to practice sketching regularly and learn from my teachers.

Sugerencia: Ý bạn rõ ràng nhưng diễn đạt bị lặp, ngữ pháp sai và thiếu ví dụ hoặc lý do cụ thể. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes/No), tiếp theo nêu 2 lý do cụ thể và kết thúc bằng một ví dụ hoặc kết luận ngắn. Dùng các liên từ như because, therefore, for instance để câu mạch lạc hơn.

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe so because trying new things helps people learn new skills and discover their strengths. For instance, learning a new language or taking up a sport can improve confidence and career prospects, so it’s worth exploring different activities.

× That cost my school when I studied when I was drawing have many activities for students to update their natural skills so I have a lot a lot of opportunities to take part in that.

✓ My school organized many activities for students to develop their natural skills when I was studying there, so I had many opportunities to take part in them.

The original sentence has multiple structure problems: incorrect word order, wrong verb choices (cost, drawing), missing articles, repeated words, and unclear referents. I corrected the sentence to a coherent past-tense description that matches the examiner's question: 'My school organized' (correct verb and subject placement), 'when I was studying there' (time clause), 'develop their natural skills' (correct verb and noun), 'I had many opportunities' (past tense agreement), and 'take part in them' (correct pronoun). Suggestions: use simple past for past events, place time clauses after or before the main clause consistently, choose appropriate verbs (organize, have, develop), avoid repetition, and ensure pronouns clearly refer to plural nouns.

× Yes, why not? If people do not update their skills and always think that they can do that, it will be is that make them become not become not successful and this is

✓ Yes, why not? If people do not update their skills and always think that they can do everything, that attitude will prevent them from becoming successful.

The original sentence misuses modals and auxiliary verbs and contains several redundant and ungrammatical fragments ('will be is that make them become not become not successful'). I simplified the conditional result: 'that attitude will prevent them from becoming successful.' Use 'will' for future consequences, avoid redundant auxiliaries, and use 'prevent ... from + -ing' to express hindrance. Also replace vague 'do that' with 'do everything' for clarity.