Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g., tense and subject agreement). Use linking words like "for example" or "so" to organize points. Aim for 2–4 sentences and focus on concrete examples of activities and how your parents involved you.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my parents always asked for our opinions and let me join the school choir and a weekend science club. Because they treated me like a capable person, I learned decision-making and gained confidence.

Sugerencia: Give a clear direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons and one short example. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., "interested in", "learn new things", "develop themselves"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas and keep sentences concise (2–4 sentences).

Ejemplo: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them learn new skills and discover interests. For example, trying a short course in photography helped my friend find a hobby that later became a side job.

× Yes, my parents really asked our opinions when they were a child or even when you were just a child.

✓ Yes, my parents really asked for our opinions when we were children or even when I was just a child.

The original sentence uses incorrect pronouns and mismatched subjects: 'they were a child' and 'you were just a child' conflict with 'my parents' and 'our opinions'. Use consistent subjects and correct pronouns: 'my parents asked for our opinions' and 'we were children' or 'I was a child'. Also add 'for' after 'asked' when referring to opinions. Suggestion: Maintain consistent subject perspective (first person) and correct verb complementation (ask for something).

× They don't consider us not members of the common but they consider us or they do not I mean they do not consider us just a child just because we are child or

✓ They didn't consider us unimportant members; they didn't see us as just children simply because we were young.

Tense and phrasing are inconsistent and unclear. The question refers to childhood (past), so use past tense 'didn't consider' and 'were'. The phrase 'not members of the common' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'unimportant members' or 'not members of the community'. Also 'just a child' should be plural 'children' when referring to 'us'. Simplify to a clear negative structure: 'didn't see us as just children'. Suggestion: Use past tense for past situations and choose clear nouns ('children', 'community', 'important').

× As long as they are interested to it, they can learn new things, they can tell new things.

✓ As long as they are interested in it, they can learn new things and can share new things.

Preposition after 'interested' should be 'in', not 'to'. 'Can tell new things' is unnatural; use 'can tell' only for stories or information, better 'can share new things'. Maintain parallel structure with conjunction 'and'. Suggestion: Use 'interested in' and choose appropriate verbs like 'learn' and 'share'.

× They can evolve themselves to different things as they can, as long as they have the resources they have, the strength and the mind to pursue the things they want.

✓ They can develop in different ways as long as they have the necessary resources, strength, and mindset to pursue what they want.

'Evolve themselves to different things' is awkward and unidiomatic. Use 'develop in different ways' or 'grow' instead. 'Mind' in this context is better as 'mindset'. Remove redundant phrase 'as they can'. Also 'the resources they have' is repetitive; 'necessary resources' is clearer. Suggestion: Use natural collocations ('develop in different ways', 'necessary resources', 'mindset') and avoid redundancy.