Opportunities— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 全体的に内容は理解しやすいですが、いくつか改善点があります。まず「watching sea turtles like eggs」という表現は不自然なので意味が伝わりにくいです。正しくは“watching sea turtles lay eggs”や“watching baby sea turtles hatch”など具体的な表現を使いましょう。また、主旨となるトピック文（夏のキャンプに行った）を明確にした後、理由や感情の説明を結びつける接続表現（for example, because, which made me）を用いて文を整理するとより論理的になります。最後に文法や語彙の小さな誤り（“made me more interesting in nature” → “made me more interested in nature”）を直し、回答は4文以内に収めて簡潔にまとめてください。

Ejemplo: Yes. My mum encouraged me to attend summer camps every year, and one year I went to a camp in Wakayama. There I watched sea turtles lay eggs on the beach at night, which was the first time I had seen anything like that. This experience made me more interested in nature and inspired me to learn about wildlife conservation.

Sugerencia: 回答は明確で自然ですが、さらに高得点を狙うには具体例や接続語を使って理由を詳しく説明すると良いです。例えば“for instance”や“as a result”などを使い、1〜2つの具体例（自分や他人の経験）を加えて、意見の裏付けを示してください。また冗長にならないように1〜2文で要点をまとめ、語彙は文脈に合った単語（benefit, broaden one’s horizons, discover strengthsなど）を取り入れると良いでしょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think so because trying new activities broadens your horizons and helps you develop useful skills. For instance, when I tried volunteering at a local charity, I learned teamwork and communication skills, and as a result I discovered that I enjoy helping others and developed more confidence.

× It was exciting because I had never seen that before and it made me more interesting in nature

✓ It was exciting because I had never seen that before and it made me more interested in nature

The phrase 'made me more interesting in nature' incorrectly uses 'interesting' (present participle/adjective describing something that causes interest). The intended meaning is a change in the student's feelings (to feel interest), which requires the adjective 'interested'. Use 'interested' after 'made me' to describe the person's resulting state. Suggestion: use 'interested' when describing how someone feels (I was interested), and use 'interesting' when describing something that causes interest (The experience was interesting).

× I clearly remember watching sea turtles like eggs at night

✓ I clearly remember watching sea turtles lay eggs at night

The original uses 'like' incorrectly; the intended verb is 'lay' (to place eggs), not the preposition 'like' (similar to). Use 'lay eggs' to describe the action of animals producing eggs. Also ensure subject-verb agreement if subject is plural (sea turtles lay eggs). Suggestion: use 'lay eggs' or 'watching sea turtles lay their eggs'.