Part 1
Examinador
Do you often feel tired?
Candidato
Yes, I'm the kind of person who very easily get tired and after a whole school day I usually felt so tired that I can't do anything else. I just want to go to my bed and take a rest.
Examinador
When would you feel tired?
Candidato
Usually after taking many classes I feel tired also if I have to socialise with other people for a very long time I also feel tired and don't want to talk to anyone else.
Examinador
What do you do when you feel tired?
Candidato
Usually I just go to bed and take a rest. Sometimes I also do some exercise, for example, working along the street.
Examinador
When you feel tired, do you still go out with your friends?
Candidato
Actually, no, if I feel tired, I just want to stay at home and take a rest, for example, watching movie alone
Do you often feel tired?
Puntuación: 67.0Sugerencia: 回答切题,也说明了疲惫出现的场景和感受。注意主谓一致和时态统一:应说“who gets tired”,描述习惯时用“usually feel”,不要在同一句中混用过去时和现在时。另外,“go to bed”比“go to my bed”自然;可以用一个连接词让原因和结果更清楚。
Ejemplo: Yes, I get tired quite easily. After a full day of classes, I usually feel so exhausted that I don't have much energy left. I just want to go to bed and relax.
When would you feel tired?
Puntuación: 65.0Sugerencia: 你给出了上课和长时间社交这两个具体情境,内容充分。建议用“especially”或“also”连接两个情况,并避免重复使用“also”和“feel tired”。可以把较长的句子拆成两句,让表达更清晰自然。
Ejemplo: I usually feel tired after several classes, especially if I've had to concentrate for hours. I also get drained when I socialise for a long time, so I may not feel like talking to anyone afterwards.
What do you do when you feel tired?
Puntuación: 60.0Sugerencia: 回答直接,但“working along the street”不符合这里想表达的意思;如果你指的是散步,应说“walking along the street”或“going for a walk”。此外,休息和运动看起来有些矛盾,可以补充说明轻度散步能让你放松,并用连接词衔接。
Ejemplo: I usually lie down and rest for a while when I'm tired. If I need to clear my head, I sometimes go for a gentle walk near my home. It helps me relax without using too much energy.
When you feel tired, do you still go out with your friends?
Puntuación: 66.0Sugerencia: 你明确回答了问题,也给出了在家休息的例子。注意句首“Actually, no”后可用句号,避免整句过长;“watching movie alone”应改为“watching a movie alone”或“watching movies by myself”。还可以补充一句说明疲惫时不想出门的原因。
Ejemplo: Actually, no. When I'm tired, I'd rather stay at home and relax because I don't have much energy to socialise. I might watch a movie by myself and go to bed early.
× Yes, I'm the kind of person who very easily get tired and after a whole school day I usually felt so tired that I can't do anything else. I just want to go to my bed and take a rest.
✓ Yes, I'm the kind of person who gets tired very easily and after a whole school day I usually felt so tired that I can't do anything else. I just want to go to my bed and take a rest.
关系代词 who 指代单数的 person,因此一般现在时的谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式 gets,而不是 get。
× Yes, I'm the kind of person who very easily get tired and after a whole school day I usually felt so tired that I can't do anything else. I just want to go to my bed and take a rest.
✓ Yes, I'm the kind of person who very easily get tired and after a whole school day I usually feel so tired that I can't do anything else. I just want to go to my bed and take a rest.
这句话描述的是通常发生的情况,应使用一般现在时。felt 是一般过去时,应改为 feel。
× Usually after taking many classes I feel tired also if I have to socialise with other people for a very long time I also feel tired and don't want to talk to anyone else.
✓ Usually, I feel tired after taking many classes. I also feel tired if I have to socialise with other people for a very long time, and I don't want to talk to anyone else.
原句将多个完整意思直接连在一起,句子结构不清晰。可以拆成两个句子,并用逗号分隔 if 条件从句与主句,让表达更清楚。
× Actually, no, if I feel tired, I just want to stay at home and take a rest, for example, watching movie alone
✓ Actually, no. If I feel tired, I just want to stay at home and take a rest, for example, watching a movie alone.
movie 是单数可数名词,前面需要加冠词。此处可用不定冠词 a,改为 a movie。