Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question more directly at the beginning. “It happens with me” is unnatural; say “I often feel tired” or “I get tired from time to time.” Also, “applications” is probably not the intended word here; use “academic demands,” “assignments,” or “responsibilities.” Avoid repeating similar ideas such as “overloaded” and “burn out,” and use a clearer linking structure.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, especially during busy periods at school. I have a lot of assignments and other responsibilities, so I sometimes feel completely burnt out. In fact, I probably feel tired several times a week.

Sugerencia: Give a concise topic sentence first, such as “I usually feel tired at the end of a busy day.” Correct the parallel structure: use “going to the gym” and “interacting with people” instead of “go to the gym and interacting.” The answer contains too many activities in one long sentence, so divide it into two or three sentences and use linking words such as “after that” or “as a result.”

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired at the end of a very busy day. For example, I may attend extracurricular activities, study for several hours, practise English and Italian, and go to the gym. By the evening, I feel exhausted because I have spent so much energy.

Sugerencia: Use more natural expressions: say “I usually go to bed and get a good night’s sleep” rather than “get a nice quality sleep,” and “take a nap” rather than “go to nap.” “Headlines” does not fit this context; if you mean schoolwork, say “deadlines.” Clarify the time as “15 to 20 minutes,” avoid starting several clauses with “if,” and finish with a complete sentence.

Ejemplo: I usually go to bed early and try to get a good night’s sleep. However, if I have an important deadline, I take a short nap of about 15 to 20 minutes. After that, I feel more refreshed and can return to my studies.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct answer and organize the explanation more clearly. Correct “ask me to go them” to “ask me to go with them,” and replace “our girls and guys” with “guys” or “everyone.” “I feel like I’m a people pleaser” is understandable, but “I tend to be a people-pleaser” sounds more natural. Break the long sentence into shorter ones and explain the result of going out while tired.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually still go out with my friends, even when I feel tired. I tend to be a people-pleaser, so I feel guilty about turning them down. As a result, I sometimes go out anyway, although I may leave early because I need to rest.

× It happens with me from time to time.

✓ It happens to me from time to time.

The preposition to is used with happen when describing something that occurs to a person. We say something happens to me, not happens with me.

× Usually after a long exhausting day full of different extracurricular activities, a lot of studying, learning English, learning Italian, maybe even go to the gym and interacting with people like all of this, it's just too much for me and at the end of the day I feel so exhausted.

✓ I usually feel tired after a long, exhausting day full of different extracurricular activities, a lot of studying, learning English, learning Italian, maybe even going to the gym, and interacting with people. All of this is just too much for me, and at the end of the day, I feel so exhausted.

The original answer begins with an incomplete phrase, Usually after a long exhausting day, which does not contain a subject and a main verb. Add I usually feel tired to make it a complete sentence. The sentence is also clearer when the long list is separated into two sentences.

× Maybe even go to the gym and interacting with people.

✓ Maybe even going to the gym and interacting with people.

The items in this list should use parallel grammatical forms. Since studying, learning, and interacting use the -ing form, go should also be changed to going.

× But if I cannot do that, if I've got some headlines, for example, so I can just go to nap for 15–20 minutes.

✓ But if I cannot do that, if I've got some deadlines, for example, I can just take a nap for 15–20 minutes.

Do not use so after an if-clause in this structure. The if-clause already introduces the condition, so the result clause should begin directly with I can. Also, deadlines is the appropriate word for tasks that must be completed by a certain time.

× I can just go to nap for 15–20 minutes.

✓ I can just take a nap for 15–20 minutes.

The expression take a nap requires the article a before the singular countable noun nap. Go to nap is not the standard English expression.

× When my friends go out and they ask me to go them, I feel so sorry to tell them that I can't go today because I'm tired.

✓ When my friends go out and ask me to go with them, I feel so sorry to tell them that I can't go today because I'm tired.

The preposition with is needed after go when you mean accompanying someone. The correct phrase is go with them. The repeated subject they is optional and can be omitted because the sentence already has the subject my friends.