Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly at the beginning by saying how often you feel tired. Use the past tense consistently when talking about childhood: “I always had,” not “I always have.” Also, avoid awkward phrases such as “at this age in mid twenties” and “feel the exhaustion”; use “now that I’m in my mid-twenties” and “feel more tired.” Divide the long sentence into two or three shorter sentences and add a clear reason.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after a long day at work. When I was a child, I had plenty of energy to play and take part in different activities. However, now that I’m in my mid-twenties, I get tired more easily because of my workload.

Sugerencia: Give a grammatically complete answer with a clear topic sentence. Use natural expressions such as “after working for several hours,” “after waiting for a long time,” and “doing household chores.” “It will provide much exhaustion” is unnatural; say “These activities make me feel exhausted.” Use linking words such as “especially” or “also” to connect the examples.

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired after working for several hours, especially if I have to wait for a long time or do household chores afterward. These activities can be exhausting because I have very little time to rest between them.

Sugerencia: State your main action directly and avoid incomplete phrases. “Once I feel exhaustion” should be “When I feel tired,” and “find myself to distress” is incorrect; use “I try to relax my mind and body.” Explain what you actually do, such as taking a shower, listening to music, or resting, and connect the details with “usually” or “for example.”

Ejemplo: When I feel tired, I usually stay at home and try to relax my mind and body. For example, I take a warm shower, listen to calming music, or watch a short programme. These activities help me recharge before I start working again.

Sugerencia: Give a clear answer first, then explain why. Replace “having a company” with “having company” or “being with friends,” and avoid repetition such as “having having them listening.” “Peers” is possible but “friends” sounds more natural in this context. Also, use “de-stressed” or “helps me relax,” rather than “distressed,” which means worried or upset.

Ejemplo: Sometimes I still go out with my friends when I feel tired. Being with them helps me relax because I can talk about my problems and have a laugh. However, if I feel completely exhausted, I prefer to stay home and rest.

× When I was a kid, I always have so much energy to play, to participate in activities now that I am at this age in mid twenties, I feel the exhaustion more when I'm working now.

✓ When I was a kid, I always had so much energy to play and participate in activities. Now that I am in my mid-twenties, I feel more exhausted when I work.

The time expression When I was a kid refers to the past, so have must be changed to the past-tense form had. Use the present tense in the second sentence because it describes your current situation.

× When I was a kid, I always have so much energy to play, to participate in activities now that I am at this age in mid twenties, I feel the exhaustion more when I'm working now.

✓ When I was a kid, I always had so much energy to play and participate in activities. Now that I am in my mid-twenties, I feel more exhausted when I work.

The natural preposition is in, not at, before my mid-twenties. The possessive determiner my is also needed because you are referring to your age period.

× Definitely after doing some work, waiting long hours or doing some household chores after work.

✓ I definitely feel tired after doing some work, waiting for long hours, or doing household chores after work.

The original sentence is a fragment because it does not contain a main subject and finite verb. Adding I feel tired makes it a complete sentence. The phrase wait for is also required before a period of time.

× Definitely after doing some work, waiting long hours or doing some household chores after work.

✓ I definitely feel tired after doing some work, waiting for long hours, or doing household chores after work.

The verb wait is normally followed by the preposition for when referring to a period of time or an expected event. Therefore, waiting long hours should be waiting for long hours.

× Once I feel exhaustion, I find myself to distress my mind and my body.

✓ Once I feel exhausted, I find myself relaxing my mind and body.

Exhaustion is a noun, but an adjective is needed after feel to describe your condition. Use exhausted instead. The phrase find myself should be followed by an -ing form, so to distress should be relaxing.

× So with that I find myself activities that come and provide peace at home so

✓ I also find activities at home that bring me peace.

The original sentence has an incomplete and incorrectly ordered structure, and it ends with so without completing the idea. The corrected sentence uses find activities followed by a relative clause, that bring me peace.

× Sometimes when I feel tired, I still hang out with my peers because most of the time having a company, listening, having having them listening to my problems, my rants also keeps me relaxed and distressed.

✓ Sometimes, when I feel tired, I still hang out with my peers because having company, listening to them, and having them listen to my problems and rants usually keep me relaxed and less stressed.

Company is generally an uncountable noun when it means the presence of other people, so a company is incorrect in this context. Use having company without an article.

× Sometimes when I feel tired, I still hang out with my peers because most of the time having a company, listening, having having them listening to my problems, my rants also keeps me relaxed and distressed.

✓ Sometimes, when I feel tired, I still hang out with my peers because having company, listening to them, and having them listen to my problems and rants usually keep me relaxed and less stressed.

The subject contains several coordinated activities: having, listening, and having. Because the subject is plural, the verb must be keep, not keeps.

× Sometimes when I feel tired, I still hang out with my peers because most of the time having a company, listening, having having them listening to my problems, my rants also keeps me relaxed and distressed.

✓ Sometimes, when I feel tired, I still hang out with my peers because having company, listening to them, and having them listen to my problems and rants usually keep me relaxed and less stressed.

The original sentence contains a repeated word, having having, and an incomplete series of parallel activities. Each activity should have a clear and consistent structure: having company, listening to them, and having them listen.