Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly, then give one or two clear reasons. Replace unnatural phrases such as “lack of sleepless” with “a lack of sleep,” and avoid repeating “I always feel tired.” Use a linking word such as “mainly” or “in addition” to connect your ideas. Also, “whether I’m active or not” is more natural than “what I do or what I don’t do.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, mainly because I do not get enough sleep and rarely exercise. In addition, I sometimes feel exhausted even when I have not done much during the day.

Sugerencia: Use the correct adverbial phrase “sleep badly” or the more natural expression “have a poor night’s sleep.” Make the cause-and-effect relationship clear: poor sleep leads to low energy and affects your mood. The final sentence is unclear; replace it with a specific explanation of how you improve your sleep schedule. Check subject-verb agreement, such as “which contributes.”

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired when I have a poor night’s sleep. As a result, I have very little energy and I’m often in a bad mood throughout the day. To prevent this, I try to go to bed and wake up at the same time every day.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence and use natural expressions such as “relax and unwind” instead of “dress and wind,” and “after a long day” instead of “after a long time day.” Explain when you take a nap and what you do if you cannot sleep. Replace “If I am being tired” with “When I’m tired,” and avoid the absolute statement “I can’t do anything” unless you clarify that it refers to concentrating or working effectively.

Ejemplo: The first thing I do is take a short nap to relax and unwind after a long day. If I cannot sleep, I take a shower or go for a gentle walk. After that, I usually go to bed early because I find it difficult to concentrate when I’m exhausted.

Sugerencia: Answer the yes/no question more directly by saying whether you usually go out or stay home. Avoid repeating “if” and use the gerund form after “instead of”: “instead of sleeping.” Clarify the logic: explain that a short walk helps you relax, after which you return home and sleep. Use “which helps me sleep better” rather than the incorrect question-like phrase “which gonna make my sleeping more efficient.”

Ejemplo: It depends on how tired I am, but I sometimes still go out with my friends. If I only feel slightly tired, we take a short walk because some fresh air helps me relax. However, if I’m exhausted, I prefer to go straight home and get an early night.

× Yes, I often feel tired and it's because I thought the reason, uh, of course some factors contribute to such as lack of sleepless, uh, exercises, but overall I always feel tired.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired because several factors contribute to it, such as a lack of sleep and exercise. Overall, I always feel tired.

The original sentence has an incomplete and unclear structure. The phrase contribute to such as is not grammatically complete. Use contribute to it, such as to introduce examples clearly.

× Doesn't matter what I do or what I don't do.

✓ It does not matter what I do or do not do.

The original sentence is missing the subject it. In this expression, use the complete structure It does not matter + clause.

× I feel tired when I sleep really bad at that night and it keeps me in low energy all day long, which uh, contribute to my mood during the day.

✓ I feel tired when I sleep really badly at night, and it leaves me with low energy all day, which contributes to my mood during the day.

Bad is an adjective, but it modifies the verb sleep, so the adverb badly is needed. The phrase at that night is incorrect in this context; use at night. Also, which refers to the singular situation described in the sentence, so the verb should be contributes.

× I feel tired when I sleep really bad at that night and it keeps me in low energy all day long, which uh, contribute to my mood during the day.

✓ I feel tired when I sleep really badly at night, and it leaves me with low energy all day, which contributes to my mood during the day.

Use at night when speaking about nighttime in general. The preposition at is not normally followed by that in this expression.

× I feel tired when I sleep really bad at that night and it keeps me in low energy all day long, which uh, contribute to my mood during the day.

✓ I feel tired when I sleep really badly at night, and it leaves me with low energy all day, which contributes to my mood during the day.

The relative pronoun which refers to a singular situation, so it requires the singular verb contributes, not contribute.

× Uh, so I always try to fix my sleeping schedule so it doesn't improve and drop my overall will.

✓ So, I always try to fix my sleep schedule so that my energy does not decrease and my motivation does not drop.

The original sentence uses an unclear structure and does not clearly show what the pronoun it refers to. Use so that followed by a clear subject and verb to express the purpose.

× Oh, the first thing I do, I take a long nap to dress and wind after a long time day.

✓ The first thing I do is take a long nap to rest and unwind after a long day.

The original sentence incorrectly places two independent clauses together. Use the structure The first thing I do is + base verb. Also, after a long day is the correct noun phrase for this meaning.

× So instead of sleep, I'm going to go take a long walk and then come later I'm going to sleep.

✓ So, instead of sleeping, I am going to take a long walk, and then I am going to go to sleep later.

After the preposition instead of, use a gerund with the -ing form. Therefore, use sleeping rather than sleep.

× If I am being tired, I can't do anything.

✓ If I am tired, I cannot do anything.

Tired describes a temporary state, so use the simple form am tired. The progressive form am being tired is not natural or grammatically appropriate here.

× If I am being tired, I can't do anything.

✓ If I am tired, I cannot do anything.

The conditional clause is grammatically clearer with the subject I followed by the linking verb am and the adjective tired. Do not use am being in this sentence.

× So which gonna make my sleeping more efficient?

✓ So, is that going to make my sleep more efficient?

The original sentence is missing the auxiliary verb is and the subject that. In a question with be going to, use the structure Is + subject + going to + base verb?

× So which gonna make my sleeping more efficient?

✓ So, is that going to make my sleep more efficient?

The original sentence does not contain a complete verb phrase because it omits is. The phrase going to must be preceded by the appropriate form of be.