Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 「Yes, I often feel tired」と直接答えられていますが、文法と自然な語の使い方を改善しましょう。「I have work as a coach」は「I work as a coach」、「my men halibard team」は文脈に応じて「my men's halberd team」または競技名を正確に言う必要があります。また、「go to the university every day to take a lecture」は不自然なので、「attend lectures at university every day」と表現します。理由を2つ述べる場合は「Besides」などの linking word を使い、3文程度にまとめると効果的です。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often feel tired because I work as a coach for my men’s halberd team. Besides, I’m a university student, so I attend lectures every day. Balancing both responsibilities can be exhausting.

Sugerencia: 質問は「いつ疲れるか」なので、最初に具体的な場面や時間を答えましょう。「when I go to the university」より「after a long day at university」の方が自然です。「I'm I went」などの言い直しや、「take a lecture」の誤用を避け、「attend lectures」と言います。ハンガリーで留学していることは補足として使えますが、友人と多く話すため疲れるという因果関係を明確にし、「After that」などの linking word でつなぎましょう。

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired after a long day at university. I’m studying in Hungary as an international student, and I often have several lectures and discussions with my classmates. By the evening, I feel mentally exhausted.

Sugerencia: 「What do you do」という質問には、まず行動を簡潔に答えます。「I try to be luxurious」はこの文脈では不自然で、「I try to relax」または「I treat myself」と表現します。「take a bus going to the gym」は、疲れている時の行動として内容が分かりにくいため、意図に合う活動を明確にしましょう。「For example」で具体例を示し、最後は「It makes me feel relaxed」と主語と動詞を一致させます。

Ejemplo: When I feel tired, I try to relax instead of doing anything demanding. For example, I might go to a café and have a cup of coffee. Sometimes I also take a short walk, which helps me clear my mind.

Sugerencia: 「No, usually not」と最初に明確に答え、その後に理由と具体例を加えましょう。「I want to just in my room」は「I just want to stay in my room」、「be chill」は会話では使えますが、ここでは「relax」の方が自然です。「my flank」は誤りで、「my friends」と言います。「if I are invited」は「if my friends invite me」、「I don't get go outside」は「I usually decline」と直します。内容が重複しているため、4文以内に整理し、「However」などで例外を示すとより自然です。

Ejemplo: No, usually I don’t go out with my friends when I’m tired. I just want to stay in my room, relax, and watch YouTube. If my friends invite me out, I politely decline and explain that I need to rest. However, I may join them if it is a special occasion.

× I often feel tired because I have work as a coach of my men halibard team.

✓ I often feel tired because I work as a coach for my men's halberd team.

The answer describes the student's regular job, so the simple present tense is needed. Use work instead of have work. The possessive form men's is also needed before team.

× I'm I went to the university to take a lecture after that I am so tired because I need to discuss a lot with my friend.

✓ I go to the university to attend a lecture, and after that, I am very tired because I need to discuss a lot with my friends.

I'm I went is not a complete or correctly formed sentence. Connect the ideas with and and use clear sentence structure. A useful pattern is subject + verb + complement.

× I'm I went to the university to take a lecture after that I am so tired because I need to discuss a lot with my friend.

✓ I go to the university to attend a lecture, and after that, I am very tired because I need to discuss a lot with my friends.

The question asks about a usual situation, so use the simple present tense: I go. The past form went does not match this regular routine.

× I need to discuss a lot with my friend.

✓ I need to discuss a lot with my friends.

The phrase a lot suggests that the student discusses many things with more than one friend in this context. Use the plural noun friends.

× I try to be luxurious, for example take a bus going to the gym and going to the cafe to drink a coffee.

✓ I try to relax. For example, I take a bus to the gym and go to a cafe to drink coffee.

Luxurious means expensive, comfortable, or related to luxury. It does not mean relaxed. Use relax as a verb after try to when describing an activity that helps you feel less tired.

× It's make me relaxed.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed.

The subject it is third-person singular, so the verb must be makes, not make. The structure make someone feel + adjective is also the natural pattern here.

× I don't think so when I feel tired I don't want to go outside.

✓ No. When I feel tired, I do not want to go outside.

The original sentence combines two independent ideas without suitable punctuation or a clear connection. Use a short answer followed by a complete sentence, and place a comma after the introductory when-clause.

× I want to just in my room and be chill and just watch YouTube.

✓ I just want to stay in my room, relax, and watch YouTube.

Want to must be followed by a base-form verb. The original phrase is missing the verb stay. Use parallel verbs after want to: stay, relax, and watch.

× If I are invited from my flank to go outside hangouts, I don't get go outside with my flank.

✓ If I am invited by my friends to go out, I do not go out with them.

The subject I takes am, not are. The original sentence also uses an incorrect subject after invited. Use by my friends for the person who invites you and them to refer back to your friends.

× If I are invited from my flank to go outside hangouts, I don't get go outside with my flank.

✓ If I am invited by my friends to go out, I do not go out with them.

Use by, not from, after a passive verb when identifying the person who performs the action. Also, go out is the correct prepositional expression for leaving home socially.

× I always am sorry.

✓ I am always sorry.

The adverb of frequency always normally comes after the verb be. Therefore, say I am always sorry, not I always am sorry.