Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答直接表达了“每天都累”的观点，也提供了工作压力这一原因，但存在较多语法和搭配问题，例如“feel energy drained”应改为“feel drained”，“settle down on my bed”应改为“lie down on my bed”，“do like myself”表达不清。最后一句突然使用“You”，会使表达不够自然；建议改为“I have to deal with...”并使用更准确的词汇。可以将答案控制在3句话内，按照“观点—原因—结果”的结构展开。

Ejemplo: Yes, I feel tired almost every day, especially after work. I often feel drained because I have to deal with my boss and some difficult colleagues. When I get home, I usually just lie on my bed and do nothing for a while.

Sugerencia: 回答能够直接说明时间，并给出了加班和工作任务两个具体原因，内容方向较好。不过“a lot of work to be followed up after”不自然，可改为“a lot of tasks to follow up on”；“cannot off work”应改为“cannot leave work”；“work over time”应为“work overtime”，“midlight”应为“midnight”。建议使用“mainly because”和“as a result”等连接表达，使逻辑更清晰。

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired after work, mainly because I often have several tasks to follow up on. I also cannot leave the office on time and sometimes work until midnight. As a result, I feel completely exhausted by the end of the day.

Sugerencia: 回答内容具体，提到了听音乐和陪狗玩，也解释了狗带来的积极影响，因此信息较充实。但“relax on myself”应改为“relax”或“take some time to unwind”，“include...and also play”应保持平行结构，改为“include listening...and playing...”；“Looking at him make”应为“Looking at him makes”。避免单独使用“Because”开头的句子，并将“the demand of tomorrow”改为更自然的“the demands of the next day”。

Ejemplo: When I feel tired, I usually take some time to unwind by listening to music and playing with my dog. He is very cute and energetic, so spending time with him helps me forget about work. After that, I feel recharged and better prepared for the next day.

Sugerencia: 回答明确表示“不出去”，并说明自己需要独处，但后半部分偏离问题，介绍“introvert”和“extrovert”显得冗余；“locking myself at home”语气过强且不够自然，可改为“staying at home”；“how a person recover”应为“how a person recovers”；“the introvert person”应为“an introvert”。“I am self-centered”和“I hate socializing”容易显得负面，建议改为“I prefer quiet time”或“I don’t feel like socializing”。答案可采用“直接回答—原因—通常做什么”的结构。

Ejemplo: Usually, no. When I feel exhausted, I prefer staying at home because I need some quiet time to recharge. I might watch a film, listen to music, or simply go to bed early instead of socializing with my friends.

× Just after my work, I often feel energy drained and I just want it to settle down on my bed and I do like myself without doing anything because working is very tiring for me.

✓ Just after work, I often feel drained of energy, and I just want to lie down on my bed and relax by myself without doing anything because working is very tiring for me.

“feel energy drained”中形容词短语搭配不正确。表达“感到精疲力竭”时，应使用“feel drained”或“feel drained of energy”。

× Just after my work, I often feel energy drained and I just want it to settle down on my bed and I do like myself without doing anything because working is very tiring for me.

✓ Just after work, I often feel drained of energy, and I just want to lie down on my bed and relax by myself without doing anything because working is very tiring for me.

“it”没有明确指代对象，而且“want it to settle down”不能表达“我想躺下”。这里的主语应该是“I”，所以应说“I want to lie down”。

× Just after my work, I often feel energy drained and I just want it to settle down on my bed and I do like myself without doing anything because working is very tiring for me.

✓ Just after work, I often feel drained of energy, and I just want to lie down on my bed and relax by myself without doing anything because working is very tiring for me.

“do like myself”不能表达“独自放松”。“by myself”表示“独自地”，与“relax”搭配更正确。

× You need to deal with your boss every day and also troublesome colleagues.

✓ You need to deal with your boss every day and also deal with troublesome colleagues.

“deal with”是固定搭配，表示“应对、处理”。连接两个并列对象时，第二个“colleagues”前面也应保留“deal with”，这样结构更清楚。

× I feel tired mostly after my work because there are a lot of work to be followed up after and also I cannot off work on time.

✓ I feel tired mostly after work because there is a lot of work to follow up on, and I cannot get off work on time.

“follow up”表示“跟进某事”时，通常要使用介词“on”，即“follow up on something”。因此，“work to be followed up after”应改为“work to follow up on”。

× I feel tired mostly after my work because there are a lot of work to be followed up after and also I cannot off work on time.

✓ I feel tired mostly after work because there is a lot of work to follow up on, and I cannot get off work on time.

“cannot off work”缺少完整的动词结构。表示“下班”应使用短语“get off work”，所以应说“I cannot get off work on time”。

× When I feel tired, I need to relax on myself. My methods include listening to different kinds of music and also play with my dog.

✓ When I feel tired, I need to relax by myself. My methods include listening to different kinds of music and also playing with my dog.

“include”后面连接并列动作时，动词形式应保持一致。“listening”和“playing”都是动名词形式，因此不能使用“play”。

× When I feel tired, I need to relax on myself. My methods include listening to different kinds of music and also play with my dog.

✓ When I feel tired, I need to relax by myself. My methods include listening to different kinds of music and also playing with my dog.

“relax on myself”不是正确搭配。表示“独自放松”时，应使用“relax by myself”。

× Because my dog is cute and he is always energetic.

✓ I enjoy playing with my dog because he is cute and always energetic.

以“Because”开头的从句不能单独成句，否则会成为句子片段。应将它与主句连接起来，例如“I enjoy playing with my dog because...”

× Looking at him make me feel recharged again and I can cope with the demand of tomorrow.

✓ Looking at him makes me feel recharged, and I can cope with tomorrow’s demands.

“Looking at him”是动名词短语，整体作单数主语，因此后面的动词应使用第三人称单数形式“makes”，而不是“make”。

× Nowadays there is a term called introvert, an extrovert to describe how a person recover after they feel exhausted.

✓ Nowadays, there are two terms, “introvert” and “extrovert,” that describe how a person recovers after feeling exhausted.

句子中提到了两个术语，因此应使用“there are”，而不是“there is”。“two terms”是复数，所以要与“are”保持一致。

× Nowadays there is a term called introvert, an extrovert to describe how a person recover after they feel exhausted.

✓ Nowadays, there are two terms, “introvert” and “extrovert,” that describe how a person recovers after feeling exhausted.

“introvert”和“extrovert”是两个术语，因此应使用复数“two terms”，不能使用单数“a term”。

× Nowadays there is a term called introvert, an extrovert to describe how a person recover after they feel exhausted.

✓ Nowadays, there are two terms, “introvert” and “extrovert,” that describe how a person recovers after feeling exhausted.

主语“a person”是第三人称单数，因此一般现在时的动词应为“recovers”，不能使用“recover”。

× For me, I'm definitely the introvert person because I am self centered.

✓ For me, I’m definitely an introverted person because I’m self-centered.

“person”是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词。“an introverted person”表示“一个内向的人”，比“the introvert person”更符合这里的泛指含义。