Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise and directly answer the question first (Yes/No and brief reason). Avoid repetition and filler words. Provide one clear specific example and link it logically using a linking phrase. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use correct grammar (e.g., 'people' instead of 'humans are uh').

Ejemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after studying all night. For example, if I have an exam and stay up late revising, I feel exhausted the next day.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence saying when you feel tired, then give specific examples connected with linking words. Eliminate hesitations and irrelevant closings like 'Thank you'. Use plural/singular correctly and smoother phrasing.

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired when I have many tasks to complete. For instance, during exam periods I have to finish performance tasks and prepare for tests, so I often feel drained.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear sequence of actions with correct vocabulary and order. Use linking words (first, then, finally). Avoid incorrect phrases like 'take a snap' and list meals in correct order if relevant. Be specific about duration and location.

Ejemplo: When I feel tired, I usually rest first by taking a short nap for about 20 minutes. After that, I eat a light meal, and then I go to a quiet place to relax and read for a while.

Sugerencia: Answer directly (Yes/No) and give a concise reason and an example of how you communicate with friends. Avoid unclear or incorrect words ('ugly' is wrong here). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use correct tense consistency.

Ejemplo: No, I usually don't go out with friends when I'm tired because I prefer to rest. I tell them I'm exhausted and ask to meet another day, and they usually understand.

× Yes, I often feel sad, I, I feel tired and that's normal because we are human.

✓ Yes, I often feel sad and tired, and that's normal because we are human beings.

The sentence repeats 'I' unnecessarily and uses 'we are human' which is better phrased as 'we are human beings' for naturalness. Also combine clauses with 'and' to avoid run-on. Suggestion: remove the repeated pronoun and use 'human beings' for clarity.

× So humans are uh, experience having experienced tiring day.

✓ So humans experience tiring days.

The original has redundant and incorrect verb forms ('are', 'experience', 'having experienced') and singular/plural mismatch. Use the simple present 'experience' for general truths and plural 'days'. Suggestion: simplify to 'humans experience tiring days.'

× It's like for example, when you are studying all night, so you will get tired because you study all night, so.

✓ For example, when you study all night, you will get tired.

Remove unnecessary filler words and repeated clauses. Use simple present 'study' for general condition and 'will get' for result in future. Avoid repeating 'so.'

× I will feel tired if there are so many, uh, activities to finish.

✓ I feel tired when there are many activities to finish.

Use present tense 'feel' for habitual conditions instead of 'will feel.' Also 'so many' is informal; 'many' is sufficient. Suggestion: use 'when' for typical situations.

× And just like, for example, in our, in our school, there are so many activities need to finish now, our performance tasks, preparing the exam and then the that's all.

✓ For example, at our school there are many activities to finish now, such as performance tasks and preparing for exams.

Problems: repeated phrases, incorrect word order 'activities need to finish' should be 'activities to finish', incorrect article use and awkward ending. Use 'at our school', 'many activities to finish', and 'preparing for exams.'

× When I feel tired so I take a snap, I take a sleep for a minute and then I eat.

✓ When I feel tired, I take a short nap for a minute and then I eat.

'Take a snap' and 'take a sleep' are incorrect collocations. Use 'take a nap' or 'have a short nap.' Also add comma after the clause. Suggestion: 'take a short nap.'

× I eat my breakfast, dinner, lunch and then I want to go to the place where is come, where is quiet, where is no noise.

✓ I eat (breakfast, lunch, or dinner) and then I want to go to a place that is quiet and has no noise.

Order of meals was illogical and commas misused; also 'where is come' is incorrect. Use 'a place that is quiet' and 'has no noise' or 'is peaceful.' Clarify which meal; use parentheses or choose correct sequence.

× No, I don't go out with my friends when I felt tired and because I want to spend my time to rest, right?

✓ No, I don't go out with my friends when I feel tired because I want to spend my time resting.

Mix of present and past: 'don't go' (present) paired with 'felt' (past) is inconsistent. Use present 'feel' for habitual action. Also 'spend my time to rest' is unidiomatic; use 'spend my time resting.'

× And I will tell to them that maybe next time because I am very exhausted right now.

✓ And I will tell them maybe 'next time' because I am very exhausted right now.

'Tell to them' is incorrect; the verb 'tell' takes an indirect object without 'to' (tell them). Also place 'maybe next time' naturally. Keep tense consistent.

× So that's just like that. And they are ugly and understand because I'm here, I am, I'm their friend.

✓ So that's it, and they are understanding because I am their friend.

'They are ugly and understand' is wrong: 'ugly' is unrelated and likely a mis-saying for 'understanding.' Remove fillers and repeated pronouns. Use 'understanding' (adjective) to describe friends' behavior.