Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct tense and quantity expressions, and avoid redundancy. Use one or two supporting details with linking words. For example, say how often (e.g., five days a week) and why (long shifts) briefly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often feel tired after work. I work five days a week and usually have long shifts, so I come home feeling exhausted.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and accurately. Use correct tense and logical supporting detail. Avoid contradictions (saying you wanted to work when tired). Use linking words to connect reason and result.

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired after finishing work because I often do long shifts — around twenty hours a week — so I tend to feel drained when I get home.

Sugerencia: Be specific and use correct vocabulary. Replace unclear words ("tooth") with the intended activity (TV), and use gerunds correctly (watching, lying). Give one or two actions with linking words and a short reason.

Ejemplo: When I'm tired, I usually rest by watching TV or lying in bed for a while. I also like talking with my family about our day, which helps me relax.

Sugerencia: Keep the answer concise and coherent. State the main point, then give a brief reason. Avoid vague endings and incorrect phrasing ("hear anything"). Use linking words like 'because' to explain.

Ejemplo: No, I usually don't go out when I'm tired because I prefer to rest alone. I like lying in bed and having quiet time to recover.

× I usually go to work for times a week and long shift.

✓ I usually go to work four times a week and work long shifts.

The original sentence has a missing plural form and an unclear number. 'for times a week' is incorrect; use a specific number plus 'times' as plural: 'four times a week'. 'long shift' should be plural 'long shifts' to agree with repeated occurrence. Also add 'work' before 'long shifts' for clarity.

× So whenever I came back home after work, I felt tired and exhausted.

✓ So whenever I come back home after work, I feel tired and exhausted.

The question is about a habitual present situation, so present tense should be used. 'came' and 'felt' are past tense; change to present simple 'come' and 'feel' to express habitual actions.

× After I finished work I felt tired because I worked a long shift like like twenty hours a week.

✓ After I finish work I feel tired because I work long shifts, like twenty hours a week.

Again, this describes a habitual situation, so use present simple: 'finish', 'feel', 'work'. Remove the duplicate 'like' and make 'long shifts' plural. Use a comma before the example 'like twenty hours a week' for clarity.

× So whenever I came back home I wanted to work.

✓ So whenever I come back home I want to rest.

The original sentence contradicts context ('wanted to work' after describing tiredness). Likely intended meaning is 'want to rest'. Also change past tense 'came'/'wanted' to present simple 'come'/'want' for habitual action.

× When I feel tired I usually rest by watching a tooth or laying in my bed for a while.

✓ When I feel tired I usually rest by watching TV or lying in my bed for a while.

'watching a tooth' is incorrect; correct lexical item is 'watching TV'. 'laying in my bed' is wrong: 'lying in bed' is correct because 'lie' is the intransitive verb meaning recline. Use 'lying in my bed' or simply 'lying in bed'.

× Also I love talking with my family about daily life and

✓ Also I love talking with my family about daily life.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'and' making it incomplete. Remove the conjunction or finish the sentence. Here we remove 'and' to make a complete sentence.

× No, when I feel tired, I usually want to rest being alone so I love lying in my bed alone because when I rest I want to hear anything

✓ No, when I feel tired, I usually want to rest alone, so I like lying in my bed by myself because when I rest I don't want to hear anything.

'rest being alone' is awkward; use 'rest alone'. 'love lying in my bed alone' is okay but 'like' is more natural. The final clause 'I want to hear anything' contradicts context; intended meaning is likely 'I don't want to hear anything', so change to negative. Ensure consistent present tense 'feel', 'want', 'like', 'rest'.