Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and varied in language. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain the reason and give one specific detail. Use linking words like 'because' or 'since' and avoid repeating the same words (e.g., 'tired') twice in close succession.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often feel tired. Since my semester started a few weeks ago, I’ve had a heavier workload with classes and assignments, so I’ve been low on energy lately.

Sugerencia: Use correct verb tenses and reduce repetition. Begin with a clear sentence saying when you feel tired, then add a specific detail (travel time) and a brief consequence. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' appropriately.

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired when I get home from university because my commute takes about an hour and a half by metro, so I’m often drained by the time I arrive.

Sugerencia: Structure your answer with a topic sentence followed by specific details about what you do. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'sore' → 'aching') and a linking word to connect cause and action. Keep it within 3–4 sentences for clarity.

Ejemplo: If I feel tired, especially when my legs are aching, I use an electric leg massager and lie down to rest. After 20–30 minutes of massage I usually feel more relaxed and ready to continue my day.

× Yes, I do often feel tired because my semester started a few weeks ago and I suddenly have so much on my plate that it is tiring me out and I am always tired these days.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired because my semester started a few weeks ago and I suddenly have so much on my plate that it is tiring me out and I am always tired these days.

Use 'I often feel' instead of 'I do often feel' for natural present simple; auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary and sounds emphatic. Suggestion: remove 'do' unless emphasis is intended.

× I always feel so tired when I got back home from school because my university is quite far.

✓ I always feel so tired when I get back home from school because my university is quite far.

Mixed tense: 'I always feel' is present habitual so the time clause should use present simple 'get' not past 'got'. Use consistent present simple for habitual actions.

× It takes about 1 1/2 hour by metro.

✓ It takes about 1 1/2 hours by metro.

Singular/plural and article: with '1 1/2' use plural 'hours'. Also 'by metro' is acceptable but 'by the metro' or 'on the metro' may be more natural in some varieties. Suggestion: use '1 1/2 hours by metro' or 'about an hour and a half by metro'.

× So despite how much time I spent at the university, I just always got tired when I get home.

✓ So despite how much time I spend at the university, I just always get tired when I get home.

Tense inconsistency: 'despite how much time I spent' (past) conflicts with habitual present 'I get home'. Make both present habitual: 'spend' and 'get'.

× When I am tired my legs tend to get really sore and for that I have a massaging machine for my legs.

✓ When I am tired my legs tend to get really sore, and for that I have a massaging machine for my legs.

Comma needed before conjunction joining independent clauses to improve readability (sentence structure). The grammar type list maps this to verb + -ing? However the main issue is punctuation/structure; corrected by adding comma. Suggestion: use a comma before 'and' when joining two independent clauses.

× So I put them on and I lie down and try to relax.

✓ So I turn it on, lie down, and try to relax.

Pronoun reference and verb choice: 'put them on' ambiguously refers to 'massaging machine' (singular), so use 'turn it on'. Also streamline parallel verbs: 'lie down and try to relax' is fine; combine for smoother phrasing. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedent and use concise parallel verbs.